The world today needs very competitive individuals to be able to get their basic needs. I agree with suggestion that it is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. I have taken many factors into account on which my stance is based. I will explain my reasons below.
To begin with, working only for three days will give free time for the employees. Time is a very precious when it is exploited efficiently. The employees will have the chance to spend more time with their families which is extremely vital to their emotions stability. In addition, they could use this free time to study and get training in many fields that will result in enhancing their overall efficiency. For instance, someone can complete his post-graduation studies during this time. All research conducted in the recent years has confirmed that people with higher academic certification are likely to get higher and better paid jobs than those who do not have past graduate certificates.
Furthermore, it is goes without saying that having such long free time will certainly make your life less stress and more serene. they could practice their social or sport activities that will reflect on their psychological and mental health. Not only that, but also they could have another part time job to improve their quality of life and to ensure better future for their families, which would be impossible without this spare time. That would be a unique chance to have more experience in other fields or careers which is icing on the cake since they get more money and expertise. I personally work online during my free time to get extra income which enables me to live better life. That would be available if my work hours were not flexible .
In conclusion, based on what I have mentioned above I believe that working for less days with longer hours has many advantages that will increase the possibility of improving our life quality and happiness.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
... your life less stress and more serene. they could practice their social or sport ac...
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
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Suggestion: .
...lable if my work hours were not flexible . In conclusion, based on what I have ...
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun days is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79545454545 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47339444961 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539772727273 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1806349228 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2941176471 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7058823529 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386900849396 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117208522132 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.208168999875 0.0737576698707 282% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278966903144 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.206065977069 0.0645574589148 319% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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