Friendship is very precious relationship in human life and obviously, many people have some friends in their life. Depending on personal experience, personal type or emotional concern, we found that some people agrees with the statement that keeping old friends is more important than making new friends, meanwhile other thinks that it is more advisable to make new friends rather than keeping old friends. As soon as, I would disagree with the statement that keeping old friends is more important than making new friends. My arguments for this concept are in following statements.
One of my primary reason is that benefits. Most of the friendships are based on the same benefits as long as life conditions stay stable. When life condtitions change, benefits of people will not be same so meeting frequency of friends are going to decrease. For example, when I was in university, I lived in dormitory and have a roommate. We were like lion pride together and have same room, work room, other friends, milieu as soon as I moved to a new apartment. After, I moved, we didn't meet each other as much as past times. Hence, on my personal experience, it is clear to say that when benefits change, it will directly effects on friendships.
Another reasons why I disagree with the statement is that responsibilities of life. While we are growing up, our responsibilities rapidly increases. Therefore, we do not have much time to spend with our friends so friendships will weaker. For instance, my father is an army officer and has a lot of mission at different cities so he does not have time even spend with his family. When I hear his young time stories with his friends, I confuse because I never saw any of his friends in his stories. That's why I find out that when you have more responsibilities, it means that you have less time for your life.
In a word, benefits and responsibilities directly effect on friendships. It is sagacious the fact that making new friends is much more important than keeping old friends.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: didn't
... to a new apartment. After, I moved, we didnt meet each other as much as past times. ...
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Suggestion: That's
... saw any of his friends in his stories. Thats why I find out that when you have more ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1677.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83285302594 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83345542274 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492795389049 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 512.1 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9095118161 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2631578947 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2631578947 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.05263157895 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381398470682 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10594716432 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.183190254483 0.0737576698707 248% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264596764566 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.194172782605 0.0645574589148 301% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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