It is more important to keep your old friends than to make new friends.
There has been several disputed discussions on whether It is consequential to keep your old then make new friends or not. As for everything, there are always two sides to every question. Personally, I believe that making new friends plays a more important role than old friends. I feel this for two reasons, which I explore in the following ways.
To begin with, New friends changes your thinking towards the society; furthermore, New friends help us to how to adopt new techniques?, which can be helpful in near future; provided, New friends are good in education as well as knows which is good or which is bad. My personal experience is a compelling example of this; about 10 years, I enrolled in new school .i.e Aggarsain sain Public school, I was not good in maths and my old friends were also not good in Maths. Thus Initially, I found math very difficult; howbeit my New friend, Dakh Arora, helped me in Math and provided me with the various techniques related to how to solve the question? As I grew, I planned to do major in maths. Thus, new friends provided the key to success.
Besides, New friends, especially of the same business, helps in future growth. For better understanding, let us look at the metaphor of my brother. About 5 years ago, my brother started a new business of toys factory. His old friends are not in the business line. He faced many problems regarding how to make a cost-effective toy so that he can make a handsome profit. Then his new friend Mukesh, who is Chartered Financial Analyst by profession, who helps my brother to how to make a cost-effective product. As they grew, their friendship lived in high stage. Therefore, new things always come with positive factors.
In conclusion, although in some scenarios, old friends play a more significant role than new friends. Nevertheless, these scenarios does not make new friends insignificant. Thus, I personally believe that new friends give you more strength because they change the mindset towards society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, furthermore, if, look, nevertheless, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, well, as for, i feel, in conclusion, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1675.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89766081871 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81642095753 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.2713715568 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.75 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.462404712922 0.236089414692 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136658506759 0.076458572812 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144432518894 0.0737576698707 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.314219939293 0.150856017488 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124617193725 0.0645574589148 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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