It is more important for teachers to connect with students than to be experts in their fields

Some people believe that having familiar bonds with their students are more important for teachers compared to their knowledge. Others say that having expertise on their specific fields is the most important ability for teachers. My view on this issue is same with the latter people. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in following essay.
To begin with, the main and original role of the teachers are teaching their students, not become a friend of them. Therefore, achieving abilities to teach specific knowledge should be considered as a top priority of every teacher. If teachers focus more on their relationships with their students than the origin role of them, the overall academical achievement of students will be decreased. For example, when I was in my high school years, there were a teacher who assigned both role of school counselor and Korean language teacher. It would be perfect if she had succeeded to do both roles, unfortunately, she focused on the counselling than the teaching. I was assigned to her Korean language class, but the quality of her lecture was relatively low compared to others who teach the same subject. It was also not suitable to prepare ‘suneung,’ the Korean SAT. Therefore, I could not help but registered in private academy to prepare the test.
On top of that, the teacher who lack the knowledge do not have authority. Having extraordinary knowledge about their major subjects is prerequisite of teachers. However, if their ability is overwhelmed by their students, they cannot be able to maintain their authority as a lecturer. To be specific, one of my friends was born in London, UK. However, since his parents are both Korean, he moved to Korea when he was sixteenth. Thanks to his cultural backgrounds in UK, his English fluency had outweighed the abilities of English teachers in my middle school. Also, his ability to explain difficult questions was superb. As time goes by, he became our English mentor who was not only better than ordinary teachers but also easier to visit. At the end of the semester, my classmates asked almost every question about English subject to him, not teachers.
In conclusion, as a teacher, having bonds with their students is important. Nevertheless, they should remember the original role of them and be cautious the fact that they can be surpassed by their students. Therefore, I assert that the teacher should focus on their expertise than making connection with students.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, for example, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2074.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03398058252 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74653913795 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509708737864 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.7758990908 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4166666667 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1666666667 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386958295182 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10551133207 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112985233409 0.0737576698707 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259269641686 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0889715961736 0.0645574589148 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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