It is necessary for companies to invest more money on improving their employees' job skills.
Some people might say that it is unnecessary for companies to invest more money on improving their employees' job skills, while the other might not. Both sides have their own reasons to support their views. If I were asked to choose one, I would say that it is necessary for companies to invest more money on improving their employee's job skills. There are some reasons why I think this way, but the most important reasons are as follows.
To begin with, investments can allow employees to increase their specialties on their fields. The increase on their specialties makes them to work more efficiently and creatively. This tendency is likely to bring a better profit-making ability for companies. Let me bring up my personal story as an example. When I worked in a IT company as a data scientist, I was lack of skills related to data acquisition and analysis. There were a policy that employees could take courses about their related fields online. I took courses about data analysis and visualization after I came back from work. As a result, It helped me save my time when I preprocessed the acquired data and I could do work more effectively.
In addition, investments for employees' skill improvements make employees to show their fidelity on their companies. When companies make an investment on their skill improvement, it is likely that they feel like they are important and essential people in their companies. This results in a low turnover rate of employees. According to the research conducted by Korea Labor Center, some companies that give expensive state-of-the-art programs and instructions to their employees show twenty turnover rates, while other companies which neglect the employee's requirements about offering training opportunities show eighty percent turnover rates over three years.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is better for companies to invest more money in improving their employees' job skills. The investments would bring high profits to a company and low turnover rates.
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- It is necessary for companies to invest more money on improving their employees' job skills. 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to visit museums in order to learn about a country. 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, while, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1737804878 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9025655204 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506097560976 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.8453176507 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2777777778 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61111111111 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.508937926061 0.236089414692 216% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170931751279 0.076458572812 224% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.20303334214 0.0737576698707 275% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.36887731401 0.150856017488 245% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.166146151164 0.0645574589148 257% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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