A contoversial issue relating to whether migration to other areas having defect about losing lod friends has been brought to the attention of the public. Relevant authorities are urged that this movement also contribute to make new conncetions and enlarge individual netwoks. From my personal perspective of view, the above statement is agreeable and accordingly some reasons are illusrtated below.
The first aspect to point out is that, the launch of newly established technology exaggerates the possibility of keeping in touch with old friends through relatively long distance. At the maintime, the highly connceted high-speed railway system accompanied with airplane, ferry, highway form the national public transportation system, expnding our imagination that meet friends who live in sparse cities within few hours. To illustrate, one of my friend Jimmy, who move from Jinan to near city Yantai which distance is about 2 hours by train. When I miss him, I always use Wechat, a widely used instance messager application in Asia, to message him or directly make phone calls. If some certain situations, we want to hang out and play games with each other, we simply book a train ticket and expect to have face-to-face experience subsequently.
A futhermore significant point is that, as the old proverb goes, “absence makes the heart goes fonder”; Needless to say, the less time a couple can spend on meeting each other, the more possibility they miss their past hppiness instead of brusting into quarrel, strengthening their mutual relationship. Based on my personal experience, I had been working for three years as a stage dancer in a prestigious theatre which is located in an isolated province of south-east Vietnam before I backed to my motherland. Because of the lengthy waiting of disparting from my girlfriend, I vitually forgot all her character’s defects and only was missing the sweet moment we spent togther, and my girlfriend did the same thing of manipulating disproportion between forgetting and recalling. Consequently, after one month, when we finally met each other we literally embraced together and had a contented weekend. In some distinctive cases, elongated length evokes fluctuating feelings and intensifys relationships.
In brief, by taking into account all the aforementiond reasons, it seems that people will gain many benefits by doing to other cities or countries. Therefore, the assertion surrendering opportunities gained by moving to anothr city because of reserving connections of old fiends is sufficient for the reason that the advantages received do not compnsate for the opportunities mentioned we lose, which be formed by, first, implementation of hi-tech deminishs the strangeness between friends who can not meet, second, the distance and long time serve as condensation of feeling preparing for the next eruption when meet.
- it is not a good thing to move to a new city or country because we will lose old friends 90
- It is important to know about events happening around the world even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life 76
- Parents today are more involved in their children s education than were parents in the past 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[4]
Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
...companied with airplane, ferry, highway form the national public transportation syst...
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Line 3, column 822, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'experienced'.
Suggestion: experienced
... ticket and expect to have face-to-face experience subsequently. A futhermore signific...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, second, so, then, therefore, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2438.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.429844098 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06486635707 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 299.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.665924276169 0.524837075471 127% => OK
syllable_count: 737.1 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.7866844845 48.9658058833 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.533333333 100.406767564 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9333333333 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215785443555 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553795600499 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446088218138 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114844652548 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427142729387 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 11.7677419355 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.81 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.28 8.01818996416 128% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 86.8835125448 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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