It’s much easier to achieve success with help from one’s family than what is like before.
Some people think that nowadays, it’s much easier for people to gain success from their family members’ help. Others, however, think that such statement is fallacious. Personally, I agree with the statement. My reasons are as follows.
First, success means getting good scores for most students like me. Since people are getting richer and richer nowadays, parents have enough money to provide financial supports for their kids. For instance, before I went to college, my parents gave me 2000 dollars to spend. As a result, I spent 1000 dollars on my laptop, and another thousand dollars on hardware peripherals such as keyboard, graphical card, etc. Thus, when I went to college, I had a decent computing device to do programming homework, and thanked to the computer, I got extremely good grades in several programming courses. Nevertheless, fifty years ago, my country is still a developing one, which means that most parents do not have enough money to sustain their children’s life.
Secondly, these days, parents place an emphasis on parental relationship, so parents understand their children more than anybody else. For instance, when my cousin Jammy was studying in college, he did not know which major to choose. Thus, he asked his parents which department should he studied, and they all told him that he should study physics. As a result, he always told me that it turned out to be a fantastic idea he got extremely good grades in various theoretical physics classes. In other words, his parents gave him an adequate and satisfying suggestion because they knew his talent more than anyone else. Nonetheless, my grandparents did not care about my father, so they did not give him advice about which major to choose in college. Eventually, he studied in a department that he disliked a lot.
Finally, success means becoming a well-educated person for most adults. Apparently, parent nowadays spent a significant amount of effort on their kids’ education, which in turn help them become a smart individual. Take my friend Todd as an example. Todd’s parents spent more than 40,000 dollars per year sending him to Australia to learn English when he was 5 years old. In addition, they also hired a famous tutor to teach him math. Thus, when he grew up, he become a well-educated businessman. However, Todd’s maternal grandparents did not assist her in her education. To be more specific, they thought that women should become a housewife instead of working outside. Thus, his mother did not become a successful educated person when she grew up.
In conclusion, I agree with the statement because I maintain that parents these days are becoming wealthier and wealthier, place an emphasis on relationship with their kids, as well as focusing more on their children’s studying.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Students can learn as much by watching films as they learn by reading books 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the statement parents should let children make mistakes and let them learn from them 81
- Do you agree or disagree Having a job in which you work with other people is better than having a job in which you work alone 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 73
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, finally, first, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2348.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11546840959 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75507747903 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533769063181 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.6413805686 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.962962963 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.59259259259 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105570683191 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0284255658335 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515098374067 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0748272031522 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675305797925 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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