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These days the most companies are looking for individuals who has an ability of specific skills including not only professional but also social activity, team working, self-improving and other sport skills. During the study year, most students concerned only on their academic subject. Hovewer, in my opinion, they should spend equal time on improving their physical body and social life. Nevertheless, some students spend less time on such activity due to less social activity occured on campus or university which is limited due to recieves less financial support. For this reason, I agree with the statement that sport and social activity should recieve same financial support as classes and libraries. I have two statement why I think it is important and why it should reviece same financial support.
First of all, social activities imprive individual self-improving, communicating and team working skills. Moreover, by attending more social activity, students will learn from thier peers a lot of life soft skills. When I was in freshman, I was a shy student why spend less time on social activity. A year later, I entered in student union of my university which enables me to communicate many different people who teaches me plenty of soft skills that is beneficial for my future career and social life. Hence, I would like to say that, if there are more social activity, more students will attend. As result, their soft skills will improve just like I imporved mine.
Secondly, for our lifetime, our physical health is first-rate value. At university, students spend plenty of time behind the desk which lead them fragile physical health condition. I think by proving more sports for students, they will spend quilifiad hours on gym. As I observed, the most universities offered limited sport acitivities such as basketballs and volleyballs but, there are other acitivities like ping-pong, air tennin, billiard, darts, football et cetera. This might be the reason why some students spend less time on sports. Therefore, university should plan more budget to increase sport type that some students love to play.
In conclusion, In my own opinion, I would suggest university to spend equal financial support for sports and acitivies. By providing enough budget on such things, students will graduate from the university not only great academic knowledge but also great communicating skills and better physical health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2040.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27131782946 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74010996715 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524547803618 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9332238398 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.35 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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