Many people believe that it is very important to make large amount of money while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each point and take a stand. Give specific reasons for your position.
Money has become our fundamental need and resource to operate daily life. Life without money in the 21st century is hard to imagine as we need money in every aspects of life from birth to death. But isn't it a greed if we only run after money and leaving everything asides. In my opinion, money is not only thing that we need in our life. We should earn money but large amount of money is a greed. I will explore how we can live a comfortable and satisfied life with less money.
It is needless to explain how greedy we have become for money. It seems like we are in a long race of earning large amount of money to have a happy lifestyle. But does money bring happiness? I doubt it. Many researchers has shown that having a large amount of money brings depression, trauma, stress and several other psychological problems. Money is just a means not an end. Even having less money we can still have satisfied and comfortable living.
To fulfilling the basic needs we need money. But we really don't have limits of how much money do we need to live a life on earth. Human beings are such a creature that never satisfies with its need and desire. We all want more and more of everything. If we critically think about our real value of living, money don't have it play role. Human has thrived through thousands of years without money yet their life was happy and satisfied. We can all agree that we can't live like a nomad in civilized world without money but even earning money that fulfills the basic needs of family makes out living comfortable.
The capitalist and consumerism is the root cause of problem with the money. We are governed by consumerism where the corporate has governed our desire and made a condition to want more and more. Being a conscious consumer, we can have a meaningful lifestyle. Being a consumer, if we could make proper use of available resources we can live a meaningful life. Earning more only doesn't makes us prosperous but right use of available resources makes a comfortable living.
To conclude, we need to change our perception towards money and should start to think critically that even with minimal money how we can have comfortable living. The never ending needs and desires of money has lots of negative consequences on society and environment. We should stand up from our own greed and start living a sustainable life in which we are living the happy life that nature has provided us.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: isn't
...spects of life from birth to death. But isnt it a greed if we only run after money a...
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...asic needs we need money. But we really dont have limits of how much money do we nee...
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Suggestion: don't
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...eal value of living, money dont have it play role. Human has thrived through thousan...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, still, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1996.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59907834101 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49356878411 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451612903226 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0712275524 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.2857142857 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.46428571429 5.45110844103 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148750626003 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581278122939 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502819279546 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105777661021 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455837289041 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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