Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
IIt is undeniable that movies and television become essential in almost all people's life. people at different ages watch movies, starting from babies and up. Moreover, they certainly have an effect on the way young people behave. In my view, I think that they have more negative effects than positive effects.
First, most of the time, movies and television reflect an unrealistic image about other's life in a way that many people believe it. In fact, if people act similar to the actors in the movies, their behavior will be unacceptable in our community. For instance, one of my colleague starts to steel from other students, and his reason is his financial status.yasterday, I discovered that he got this idea from one of the common movies in the last century. According to my colleague story, movies and television caused a negative effect on him and on our university students. that's why young people have to be careful in watching any thing.
Second, many scenes in the movies are dangerous, and they are made with the supervision of different kind of proficinals. In real life, recreating any movie scene will have a very bad effect. For example, my brother likes to watch cars movies. last year, he tried to race with one of his friends in the highway. His speed was 80 mph. Consequently, he lost the control, and a horrible accedent happened. he broke his hand and spend 3 weeks in the hospital. All of that was because of one of his favorite movies about cars racing.
To sum up, I think movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects, not only because of the unhealthy cercumstances, but also movies have many concepts that do not fit our standards. young people have to be conscious while watching movies. In addition to that, parent's supervision is crucial for what their kids are watching.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, second, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in fact, kind of, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1517.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83121019108 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67681363766 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547770700637 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3722708092 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.85 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.65 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40905729388 0.236089414692 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114508121883 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127255908855 0.0737576698707 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.293254889468 0.150856017488 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14689631245 0.0645574589148 228% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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