In my view, television has a huge impact on our present life and can be like both sides of a coin, destructive or advantageous. It entirely depends on its usage and the way that we face this device. it could be as useful as a resourceful teacher or as devastating as drugs! I will illustrate the main points of both sides to clarify my purpose for above statement.
For the bright aspect of this phenomena, imagine you move to the new country and have no idea how to communicate to that society, the language, the customs, their lifestyle are totally obscure for you. How frustrated you are in that circumstance without the assistance of this mystique box. But don't worry you are about opening the doors of that new realm if you have TV at the house! it was my real story when I moved to the USA. I was almost lost and about to be despondent since it seemed a huge communication gap and even cultural shock for me at the beginning but the national cable rescued me!
I started to watch Tv shows and series like Friends and Allen show which help me to swim into this new ocean and not get drowned, besides it has been a treasure of worlds, slangs.... and has had a profound influence on my accent.
On the other hand, the dark side sometimes doesn't sound hazardous. The annihilation of its programmes on the youth or our adolescents is not compromising. The movies are replete with sexual and violation scenes which might engender early puberty and the mental or physical issues for our children. For example, I read an article about the inadvertent pregnancy below fifteen years old. it stated the statistic shows this incident has been increased during this past decade and the sociologists have claimed that the outrageous contents of the TV shows are the main reason for this social disaster. As you see the flip side of the coin has had catastrophic consequences on the society.
In conclusion, I can restate that the outcomes rely on the way of the usage and a wise fellow hold its curb and not let it be the ruler of our affairs.
In my view, television has a huge impact on our present life and can be like both sides of a coin, destructive or advantageous. It entirely depends on its usage and the way that we face this device. it could be as useful as a resourceful teacher or as devastating as drugs! I will illustrate the main points of both sides to clarify my purpose for above statement.
For the bright aspect of this phenomena, imagine you move to the new country and have no idea how to communicate to that society, the language, the customs, their lifestyle are totally obscure for you. How frustrated you are in that circumstance without the assistance of this mystique box. But don't worry you are about opening the doors of that new realm if you have TV at the house! it was my real story when I moved to the USA. I was almost lost and about to be despondent since it seemed a huge communication gap and even cultural shock for me at the beginning but the national cable rescued me! I started to watch tv shows and series like Friends and Allen show which help me to swim into this new ocean and not get drowned, besides it has been a treasure of worlds, slangs.... and has had a profound influence on my accent.
On the other hand, the dark side sometimes doesn't sound hazardous. The annihilation of its programmes on the youth or our adolescents is not compromising. The movies are replete with sexual and violation scenes which might engender early puberty and the mental or physical issues for our children. For example, I read an article about the inadvertent pregnancy below fifteen years old. it stated the statistic shows this incident has been increased during this past decade and the sociologists have claimed that the outrageous contents of the TV programmes are the main reason for this social disaster. As you see the flip side of the coin has had catastrophic consequences on the society.
In conclusion, I can restate that the outcomes rely on the way of the usage and a wise fellow hold its curb and not let it be the ruler of our affairs.
- Independent TOEFL essay - TPO 9: Agree or disagree? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. 80
- TPO 36- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children(five to ten years old) than to spend money on universit 90
- Describe one of the most important days in your life and why it was so important to you. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- Television advertising directed children toward young children (aged 2 to 5) should not be allowed 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Line 5, column 604, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e main reason for this social disaster. As you see the flip side of the coin has h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, so, for example, in conclusion, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56793478261 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65474388803 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.2694714564 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.066666667 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5333333333 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26666666667 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366184129036 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122560043605 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.168102417531 0.0737576698707 228% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272766378947 0.150856017488 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.283245753005 0.0645574589148 439% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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