Nowadays, children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phone, video games, for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for the children's development.
As the information technology prospers, our daily life is changing constantly. Children’s entertainments are totally different now. More and more kids prefer to play computer games instead of having fun with friends outdoors. They rely so much on the smart and portable devices that they forget the importance and advantages of playing simpler toys, which are better for children’s development in fact.
Firstly, playing simpler toys fosters children’s imagination. In TV series, video games and other high-technology entertainments, everything, from stories to rules, is set, leaving no room for children to create anything. In contrast, the simpler the toys are, the more space there is for children’s imagination. In this way, even a small garden can be a magical kingdom for children. Rocks and dirt won’t limit creativity. Putting different ideas into the same toys, children play in a new way every time , also their own way. Unfortunately, imagination is what high-tech entertainment is not able to bring them.
Secondly, Playing outside in a simple way is good for children’s health. Most outdoor activities such as football and baseball contain a lot of body movements. While running and jumping in the field, children breathe fresh air outside and get exercise. As a consequence, their body is strengthened. However, playing with computers or smart phones lacks such advantages. Too much screen time only contributes to more sedentary lifestyle and turns increasing number of kids to couch potatoes. Moreover, it also results in short eyesight and obesity problems. From this perspective, we can also draw the conclusion that simple outdoor games are better.
Thirdly, playing outside helps children make friends. Children learn to cooperate with others through multiplayer games. There is no better way to promote friendship than to play an outdoor ball game. Children become familiar and begin to build trong ties in outdoors games. It’s also a great chance to make new friends. I met one of my best friends Bess when I was playing badminton with my cousin. She was quite interested in badminton too. Owning to the same hobby, we soon became friends. And even until now, we still play badminton together several times a year.
Although high-technology equipments can provide children with relaxation, its drawbacks are also obvious. In contrast, simple activities enable a child to have friends, vivid imagination and a strong body. Without doubts, it’s more beneficial for children’s all-round development in the long run.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 323, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ere is for children's imagination. In this way, even a small garden can be a ...
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Line 2, column 497, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a new way" with adverb for "new"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ideas into the same toys, children play in a new way every time , also their own way. Unfort...
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Line 2, column 520, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s, children play in a new way every time , also their own way. Unfortunately, imag...
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Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a simple way" with adverb for "simple"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... bring them. Secondly, Playing outside in a simple way is good for children's health. Mos...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, while, in contrast, in fact, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2184.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11383358615 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3832954269 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.4516129032 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.9032258065 20.6045352989 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.74193548387 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 11.8709677419 202% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.416983525614 0.236089414692 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0964223187029 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859696102428 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22902507476 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570917285799 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 58.1214874552 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.5 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.