In the modern era, besides having good knowledge, people should have good skills to be employed in a job. Also, a good relationship with people would have a specific rule in future success. Many people adhere to the view that teenagers should concentrate on their study major and lessons to be successful in their future life, while others believe that they should have a part-time job to be a responsible person in the future. Ego, when it comes to my stance, by weighing up the pros and cons, I firmly hold that persuade the youth to take a part-time job would have a dramatic influence on their future life. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my view of point.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that it will learn them earning money is not as easiest as they thought. All the modern generation, just want to fulfill their desires and they do not know how and from where their parents obtain money. Therefore, as they work by individual, they could easily realize their family. On the other hand, having an income increase their self-confidence. My personal experience-compelling example of this. My father paid me 200 $ per month, I was not satisfied by this scenario, but as soon as I became 15 years old, my father found me a job that paid me 100$ per month. It was very enjoyable for me to earn money and I could manage my money after that time.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that having work experience play a big role in our future life. The best things demand the best background. For instance, my previous example could explain my claim better. After graduation from university, I could find my favorite job with a high salary, while my classmates, which have no work experience, are still jobless.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, taking a job could have a great impact not only on children but also on any ages of people. It would lead the people in an independent life. The most successful leaders had the worst and intolerable life in the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 464, Rule ID: CURRENCY[2]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$200'.
Suggestion: $200
...ling example of this. My father paid me 200 $ per month, I was not satisfied by this ...
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Line 2, column 595, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$100'.
Suggestion: $100
..., my father found me a job that paid me 100$ per month. It was very enjoyable for me...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, still, therefore, while, for instance, in brief, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70994475138 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75887305289 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555248618785 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.92137863 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7368421053 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0526315789 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177386885175 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0531273533141 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047233278762 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105257050355 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264245429265 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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