A or D :Parents should give money to their kids for their high marks at school.
Washing dishes for 1 dollar, cleaning the lawn for 5 dollars, however, a kid can easily get 10 dollars or more from their parents for their high grades at school. While some parents may feel satisfied with the short-term progress made by giving children money,I actually believe that giving money may impact kids unexpectedly.For this, I think parents should not give money to children if they got high marks.
Money reward in fact distorts the true meaning of studying.By constantly giving money, parents thought to motivate children to study harder.Indeed they really achieve it somehow-children shift from study-trigger to money-trigger, so all their hard work is only for money not learning itself.Students only focus on the marks instead of knowledge and interest behind them.And this may have even more serious effect:students begin to cheat in exams in order to get good marks for money.In this circumstance, money actually cause distortion in kids’ study reason and value.
By the way,money definitely is not the only motivation. By giving a face kiss or a bear hug, parents can easily express their happiness for kids’ success, also strengthen the family bond. Compared to money, a warm behavior from family members is much more satisfying for kids, and can last longer, like I can easily remember my mother’s praise for my top ranking.Also since kids lack of knowledge for money management, parents can also buy a toy car which is in their son’s wish list for so long instead of giving free reins to him, preventing him from being a lavish spender.
In conclusion, I disagree that parents should give money to kids for their study grades, kids can benefit and be encouraged more from other ways rather than this. Also, money is not an effective trigger from long-term aspects.
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'i think', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'by the way']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.281345565749 0.229887763892 122% => OK
Verbs: 0.134556574924 0.158761421928 85% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0764525993884 0.0866891130778 88% => OK
Adverbs: 0.085626911315 0.046263068375 185% => Less adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0519877675841 0.0685040099705 76% => OK
Prepositions: 0.131498470948 0.118717715034 111% => OK
Participles: 0.039755351682 0.0351676179071 113% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.81953557558 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0275229357798 0.0309702414327 89% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0581039755352 0.0887237588012 65% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0336391437309 0.0209618222197 160% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00305810397554 0.0139019557991 22% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1820.0 2387.08602151 76% => OK
No of words: 296.0 408.028673835 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.14864864865 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.48200974243 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.35472972973 0.338922669872 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.266891891892 0.251872472559 106% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.172297297297 0.174417080927 99% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.097972972973 0.112833075102 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81953557558 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60472972973 0.524397521467 115% => OK
Word variations: 67.1825293536 59.2087087015 113% => OK
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6684587814 39% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.5533526081 180% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 164.877179667 48.84282405 338% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 227.5 120.699889404 188% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 37.0 20.5533526081 180% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.625 0.644075263715 252% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.54480286738 252% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 63.6891891892 45.7405998639 139% => OK
Elegance: 1.66292134831 1.45489161554 114% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.443813653355 0.300154397459 148% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.16578173451 0.103427244359 160% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.081047605396 0.0752933317313 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.657756040242 0.497263757937 132% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.209802307097 0.151897553556 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.206194830288 0.114077575197 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107674266321 0.0781384742642 138% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.303910228247 0.336927656856 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.014742130635 0.067059652881 22% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.307742882109 0.210909579961 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0992192176853 0.0618886996521 160% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8870967742 59% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 7.0 13.6433691756 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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