In order to stay healthy, many people choose to exercise. Some people tend to exercise individually such as running and riding bicycles, etc. Some people tend to participate in group exercises such as team sports. Which one do you prefer and why?
There is no doubt that health is the most vital issue in everybody's life. Physical and mental health, as the two essential needs for living, make people to pay enough attention to their body by doing exercise I personally prefer to do team sports to keep my fit. I feel this strategy works better than individual sports for the some reasons, which I will elaborate on them in the following essay.
First, exercising along with other people is so much motivating and helps you to endeavor your hard-work. Actually, working out is not a conveient practice and needs to be determined. Being along with other peers gives you enormous incentive which stimulates you to last the exercise till end of your plan. To put in the perspective, I remember when I was student in a high school I practiced with the volyball team of high school every day. It was a demanding job running for twenty minutes to warmup and jumping up hundreds of time. During those practice we cheer each other and oush ourselves to last until the last movement. Not only did those motivation help us to bear the difficult practices, but also gradually have made our mussles ready to participate in games very well.
Second, the group sports are more enjoyable rather than individual sports. Mental readiness as a integral part of any sport needs to be connected with your sportmates. Communicating with your team memebers in those group sports help athletes to have a better social personlaity. During working out with other peers always there is some body to mtell a joke and make a happy and friendly environment which makes all people have a fun time and laugh. This is a strong booster of mural in hard time of working out. For instance, again when I was in the volyball team of high school one of our team member told many funny jokes and every time open up to say anything made other to laugh. Had we not had those comic friend in our team, we could not have tolerate those hard exercises.
I conclusion, I firmly believe that working out with other people as team members outwieght to exercising alone. This is because team members motivate each other to attempt more and try to do their best and because being in a group improve your mode when a funny guy tell a lot of jokes which brings smile onto your face.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, second, so, well, for instance, i feel, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1882.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62407862408 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43304040252 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53316953317 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8216850742 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0526315789 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4210526316 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21052631579 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200872601355 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602537585162 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580554556958 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13462333754 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322613620995 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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