in the past it was easier toidentify what type of career or job would lead to a secure or successful future.
Nowadays by increasing the world population, competition among people also increases for some essential needs such as house, money, career or even some sources such as water or oil. When people compete to each other they will be prosperous or loser so there is no guarantee for a high yield based on a quality of career or products. I subscribe to the idea that the risk of doing some careers especially profitable careers is high enough so people cannot predict their job prosperous in future.
To begin with, job diversity is a main properties of societies especially in metropolitan cities. Various jobs create different facilities for people so they have many choices among millions number of people who have special experts. For example, two years ago I want to change my apartment windows. When I went for buying them I visited many kinds of products that I never had seen before. High quality products with innovative colors, material and performance. Finally I choose one of them based on my budget and need. This example reveals that diversity in products which is related to people who are expert in a special field conducive to severe competition among them. None of them can predict the number of his customers because people have many choices.
Second, I totally believe that advertisement and digital marketing play an important role in people's choices. sometimes two companies have same product but one of them spend much money for advertising and introducing the products to people so they will be more successful than other company. For instance, consider different companies that produce smart phone such as Samsung, apple, Huawei or Htc. we know that the apple company base on its extensive advertising and holding many festivals have many fans all over the world than other companies. So producing a high quality product do not guarantee more incomes for people because in competition society different factors are important for a job to be prosperous in future.
In conclusion, contemplating on aforementioned reasons, we know that nowadays many factors affect selling a product and people should consider some features of a competition society such as extensive advertising of some products or diversity of them that affect people enthusiastic towards a material.
- people benefit more from travelling in their own country than from travelling to foreign countries 68
- in the past it was easier to identify what kind of career lead to a prosperious future 3
- it is important for government to spend money to improve internet access 76
- for a successful developement of a country it is more important for the government to spend money on education of very young children than to spend money on universities 71
- the best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
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Suggestion: property
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...ative colors, material and performance. Finally I choose one of them based on my budget...
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Suggestion: Sometimes
...y an important role in peoples choices. sometimes two companies have same product but one...
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Suggestion: We
... such as Samsung, apple, Huawei or Htc. we know that the apple company base on its...
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Suggestion: in the future
...re important for a job to be prosperous in future. In conclusion, contemplating on afore...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, second, so, thus, even so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1919.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15860215054 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78726369099 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52688172043 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0585553364 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.882352941 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8823529412 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0577038116263 0.236089414692 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0214332765743 0.076458572812 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0353177583901 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0386019711409 0.150856017488 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350242523563 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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