People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries
In today's modern word, it is true that everybody has to be in rush so as to not be left behind in contending for the "field of competition", and has less time to relax; therefore, traveling plays a pivotal role in relieving one's tired soul. With this in mind, some people think that it stands to reason that it is better for individuals to travel in their own countries rather than traveling abroad, while others hold the opposite view. I, personally, subscribe to the first attitude for quite a few reasons, three of the most substantial of which are discussed below.
The most compelling reason is that while one travels inside his or her country, one should not to be concerned about the language problem. We are all familiar with tourists who are trying to clarify their meaning by various postures, that they are often less success. For example, when they are in a restaurant, they usually offer food that they do not know its ingredients due to their disability to speak with restaurants' waiters; consequently they may have an awful experience. On the other hand, when individuals travel in his or her own country, he can communicate with others in an excellent fashion.
Another interpretation as to why I don not concur with the latter perspective in the introductory paragraph lies in the fact that given the existing economic situation, one should be more conservative regarding spending their fortune. Traveling overseas is more expensive in comparison to that of one's own country due to the fact that when one traveling in his or her own country, can use bus and cars, but in order for traveling outside one should travel with airplanes. In spite of the fact that people can use airplane in order to travel in their countries too, abroad air plains' ticket are much more expensive. In addition, compared to folks, some countries sell their air plains’ ticket to tourism more expensive. Accordingly, one can save his or her fortune by traveling in one's own country, which aids them to afford traveling more.
Last but not the least reason is that with traveling in home country, people can have a better understanding about their traditions, rituals, and customs. They can know about their countries' past and their ancestors' belief, which are the corner stone of a country's culture. Even though different parts of a country may enjoy various traditions, culture of a country is formed by localizing these various traditions.
In summary, having considered all the aforementioned points discussed above, even though traveling abroad has many privileges such as being familiar with various nations' rituals, I firmly endorse my point of view that the merits of traveling in home country outweigh those of traveling overseas on the grounds that it gives a person a chance not only to travel, but also to expand his or her knowledge about their countries' culture. Moreover, it costs people less to travel inside their countries, which gives them an opportunity to travel more.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 68, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...s true that everybody has to be in rush so as to not be left behind in contending for th...
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Line 2, column 582, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an excellent fashion" with adverb for "excellent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...country, he can communicate with others in an excellent fashion. Another interpretation as to why I do...
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Line 3, column 824, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to travel'.
Suggestion: to travel
... own country, which aids them to afford traveling more. Last but not the least reason is...
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Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'as to', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in summary', 'such as', 'in spite of', 'it is true', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.207581227437 0.229887763892 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.153429602888 0.158761421928 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0794223826715 0.0866891130778 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0685920577617 0.046263068375 148% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0740072202166 0.0685040099705 108% => OK
Prepositions: 0.14440433213 0.118717715034 122% => OK
Participles: 0.0523465703971 0.0351676179071 149% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.71475869338 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0379061371841 0.0309702414327 122% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0685920577617 0.0887237588012 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0198555956679 0.0209618222197 95% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0162454873646 0.0139019557991 117% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2981.0 2387.08602151 125% => OK
No of words: 502.0 408.028673835 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.93824701195 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.350597609562 0.338922669872 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.249003984064 0.251872472559 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.201195219124 0.174417080927 115% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.135458167331 0.112833075102 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71475869338 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480079681275 0.524397521467 92% => OK
Word variations: 55.7509085696 59.2087087015 94% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 29.5294117647 20.5533526081 144% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.5233088618 48.84282405 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 175.352941176 120.699889404 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5294117647 20.5533526081 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.17647058824 0.644075263715 183% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 54.4298101711 45.7405998639 119% => OK
Elegance: 1.36585365854 1.45489161554 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321702105665 0.300154397459 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.154213664522 0.103427244359 149% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0929942090234 0.0752933317313 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.578818503066 0.497263757937 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.131844025417 0.151897553556 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143505534751 0.114077575197 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845349067555 0.0781384742642 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.304424954148 0.336927656856 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0508684018996 0.067059652881 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216780840347 0.210909579961 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0797241921139 0.0618886996521 129% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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