People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.

Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that traveling in our own country has more benefit for ours and our country. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that we travel to another country is a good opportunity for knowing about other societies and obtaining a lot of experience during this travels. I, to a great extent, agree with idea that internal our country traveling should be first choices of anyone for travel object .
First and foremost, in my opinion, to achieve the aim of identity various cultural we should be started to knowing about the culture of the different region of our country. Through reading and watching documentaries and internet researching we can obtain very little surface knowledge about lifestyle and natural condition of each region. therefore, it is necessary to getting information with direct traveling to the area. For example, I am a mountain climber and read a lot about shahuo mount where is an amazing region and etc. But I find out I can not understand the beauty of this area until when I travel to this place myself. I find this opportunity to speak with a very nice people who was really the best host and I eat wonderful foods and see pictures that I never can see anywhere. Like of this region in my country is a lot so, it is essential for me to first know about different culture of my country and get basic information for comparing with the foreign same area.
On another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that people by traveling in own country can save money in internal of our country and help to increase in money cycle of themselves country and in the long term this money came back to themselves.
Finally, yet importantly, internal traveling led to avoiding from migration from village to the big cities and prevent from distractive effects of this happen. Because through traveling to the less developed regions create a lot of job for regional people and improving in the economic circumstance of the village. In this condition not only avoid from migration but we help to maintain the special culture of a region.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that traveling in own country is important for knowing and protection our traditional culture and economical promoting of our country and preserving of the structure of society.

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Average: 7.1 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, really, so, still, therefore, for example, in my opinion, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1969.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86172839506 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70949059244 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498765432099 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.3264963687 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.266666667 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269627875958 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0951685627313 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734490476683 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165195875935 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580438793534 0.0645574589148 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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