Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that all psychologist and religious guides subscribe that maintaining old friendships are very important for happiness and success of people. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that good living in modern society, need the wonderful ability to make new friendships with powerful people. Whereby, we can obtain a lot of benefits from them. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that the ability to maintain a friendship with few number of people over the long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make new friends easily.
First and foremost, merely old friends are who stand in our side at the time of problems. For example, three years ago, I faced with a serious failure in my business. I was pre-near to lose everything, I should sell my house and car. Nonetheless, some of my school friends assisted me, and help me to pass this terrible time. They borrowed some money to rent a house and helped me to find a new job. While all of my co-worker that I was really counting on them, left me behind.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that old friends are just a solid person which we can get advice from them. We know them for the long period of time, so their confidence and genuine proof to us. Nevertheless, maybe, some advice of new friends drive us to wrong ways. Because some people abuse from our problems to take advantage of it. For example, my business depression was because of deceiving suggestion of one of my colleague.
Finally, yet importantly, people who make a lot of friends, but are not able to keep their old friendships, always feeling loneliness. Most short-term friendships, forming for some specific aims that have some benefits for both sides. Therefore, in each of them do not shape deep feelings, which is necessary for creating a sense of belonging and happiness in human. This fact can explain why the incidence of depression and stress is higher in those people rather people who maintain their old friendships.
On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that the ability to maintain friendships with few number of people is more important than making a lot of new friends easily. Because old friends are the confidence supporter and adviser for us, and they are the person who can have the role of a nice family for us.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
...e ability to maintain a friendship with few number of people over the long period of time ...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...with few number of people over the long period of time is more important for happiness than th...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ce from them. We know them for the long period of time, so their confidence and genuine proof ...
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Line 5, column 304, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... of new friends drive us to wrong ways. Because some people abuse from our problems to ...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
...he ability to maintain friendships with few number of people is more important than making...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, really, so, still, therefore, while, for example, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78571428571 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63549381794 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516666666667 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5673871068 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7142857143 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320323755716 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890769551954 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129449285606 0.0737576698707 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190990359395 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138516433766 0.0645574589148 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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