By and large, in the modern societies which we live in, people have always been in the search of most efficient ways to cope with vicissitudes of their life. There is a plethora of people who are in the conviction that people can overcome their problems through the support of their family members or even on their own whiteout the interfere of government, while others take a radically different point of view and assert that the governments intervention is indispensable in order to surmount the problems that people may face. To the extent that my personal perspective is concerned I accord with the latter group. Among countless reasons which give adherence to my opinion, I will delve into the most conspicuous ones in what follows.
Firstly, not always is solving the problems a personal matter and the intervention of government can not only help those in trouble, but also serve the common good. People tend to consider merely their own benefits in the face of important problems, while government is looking for ways that can help people and in the same breath benefit the society as a monolithic entity. For instance my uncle wanted to marry several years ago and he didn't have enough money to purchase a house so he decided to burn parts of my grandfather's fields in order to provide a suitable place to build a small house for himself. Though his solution seemed to work out perfectly for himself, it could cause a lot of environmental pollutions and irritate neighbors. After the objection of local authorities, he didn't go through with his plan and government accepted to give him a loan to buy a house and accepted the farm lands as a guarantee of payback for the loan.
Secondly, not every family possess the financial potential to overcome important problems. Government can not only help the members of society by providing them with subsidy on their live hood, but it also can help them to face the troubles with more convenience. For example, several years ago I was suffering from liver deficiency and had my family members paid the bills, they would have been broke in a matter of months. The government's health programs enabled me and my family to pass the unpleasant situation without any economic pressure.
In short all the aforementioned reasons and examples leads to the conclusion that government's intervention is of importance for people to overcome their problems.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today are less dependent on their parents than young people in the past. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 329, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...y members or even on their own whiteout the interfere of government, while others take a radi...
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Line 1, column 432, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...erent point of view and assert that the governments intervention is indispensable in order ...
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Line 2, column 14, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is always
...us ones in what follows. Firstly, not always is solving the problems a personal matter ...
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Line 2, column 439, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...anted to marry several years ago and he didnt have enough money to purchase a house s...
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Line 2, column 790, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... the objection of local authorities, he didnt go through with his plan and government...
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Line 3, column 430, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...e been broke in a matter of months. The governments health programs enabled me and my famil...
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Line 4, column 83, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...d examples leads to the conclusion that governments intervention is of importance for peopl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in short, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1997.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91871921182 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75450630017 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529556650246 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.8730346214 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.642857143 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181939506358 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598632460831 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742846381224 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118785661537 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457651500169 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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