people should spend money on things that are long- lasting like jewerly, rather than in personal short-lived pleasures like traveling
It is critically importat that we know how to manage our budget in order for us to live a happy live. I am of the opinion that people should invest more in things that last longer. I hold this idea for some reasons that I will elaborate in the following essay.
To begin with, stocking expensive goods like jewerly, somehow gives you the feeling of being secure financially. When you are financially stabel you do not have to worry a lot if you lose the job. I feel this way due to my personale experience. Ten years ago when I got married, my mother in law gave me some jewerly that were gold. After few years my country faced an economical crise and most of the people lost their jobs. Myself was one of those individuals. Unexpectally I got fired and I was not able to find another job for almost a year. During this time, I was able to sell some of my jewerly in order to feed my kids. So, if I would not have saved something valuable like gold I cannot imagine how I was going to survive.
Moreover, expensive jewerly are also beautiful especially for women who can wear them at any kind of event. For instance, my friend graduated last year from medical school. She organized a graduation party at her house. Besides the beautiful dress she had worn she also had expensive earrings and neckle that matches and they gave her more charm and made her look prety. As you can see , there are a lot of benefits from buying expensive and long-lasting stuff.
In conclusion, I would say that it is a smart way to invest our money in durable things, because it will help you feel secure economically.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: mother-in-law
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...of my jewerly in order to feed my kids. So, if I would not have saved something valua...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to feed my kids. So, if I would not have saved something valuable like gold I ca...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...have saved something valuable like gold I cannot imagine how I was going to surv...
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Suggestion: ,
... and made her look prety. As you can see , there are a lot of benefits from buying...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, look, moreover, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1304.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 296.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.40540540541 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44622932489 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608108108108 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.7475710192 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.4444444444 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4444444444 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123525115541 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0359875120368 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044501670674 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0687231615318 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378665529867 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.0 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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