People think that increasing the use of computers and mobiles has a negative effect on young people's writing and reading skill. Do you agree or disagree?
The modern world has brought us new significant technologies which have had a considerable effect on our society, two of which are computers and cell phones. There is a controversial hotly-debate surround these devices in which opinions are divided as to whether mobiles and screens have hurt youngsters' reading and writing skills or not. Personally, it is my firm conviction that their positive effects on the young generation's skill of writing and reading outweigh negative effects. stating in the ensuing paragraphs, I will elaborate on two concrete reasons to support my standpoint.
The first worthwhile mentioning reason to champion my stance is that computers serve us with providing such information which gives us a hand to improve our skill in writing. To put it in the other words, before the invention of these electronic devices, it was impossible to have immediate access to such sources that help us with writing through connecting the internet. My personal experience of writing my personal statement is an apt clarification on this point. Two years ago, I started to apply for a prestigious university in the US in which submitting some requirements were required, one of which was a personal statement that demanded a high level of writing skill. At first, I had no idea but, having my laptop connected to the internet, I searched for its criteria and samples to have a wider sight. Consequently, I managed to complete my personal statement much more precisely and efficiently. Had I never used my laptop, I would not have come up with a great personal statement, hence, not applying.
The second vivid point to indorse my outlook is those smart electronic devices as they have become a separable part of the modern era, their crucial role in enhancing the rate of reading books is a solid fact. To be more specific, smartphones have created a golden opportunity to read e-books everywhere at any available time particularly for youngsters because they are active users of cell phones. Having my first smartphone is a compelling example to further illustration this. I always have been a big fan of reading books with different gunners, however, carrying on books was a big concern of mine. Five years before now, I received a smartphone as a present for my eighteen birthday from my brother with a large number of e-books stored on it, I, thereby, was capable of reading my favorite book on my cell phone without having to hold thick books in my hands while reading or carrying them with myself. As a result, I could read far more books than the time I did not have a smartphone.
To wrap up what has been discussed, I profoundly believe that cell phones and computers have positive impacts on the young generation to improve their both writing and reading skills. This is because computers are helping with providing easier access to sources that enrich writing skills. Besides, through smartphones reading has become more convenient due to being capable of reading in any spare time that youngsters are willing to.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...e devices in which opinions are divided as to whether mobiles and screens have hurt youngster...
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Line 1, column 418, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'generations'' or 'generation's'?
Suggestion: generations'; generation's
...hat their positive effects on the young generations skill of writing and reading outweigh n...
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Line 1, column 486, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Stating
... and reading outweigh negative effects. stating in the ensuing paragraphs, I will elabo...
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Line 5, column 712, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... eighteen birthday from my brother with a large number of e-books stored on it, I, thereby, was c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, look, second, so, while, as to, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2536.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98231827112 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83956525467 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516699410609 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 793.8 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.8782971675 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.8 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.45 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128132722076 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476392054109 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507603516706 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103234046988 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0577532397514 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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