people today spend too much on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
In today's modern world, people are involved in their hectic life. Due to experience and personal characteristics, different people have different lifestyle. Nowadays, there is a heated controversy among experts and psychologists about whether people spend too much time doing their hobbies or they try to do tasks which are necessary. I, for one, subscribe to the idea that people spend too much time on their enjoyments for quite a few reasons, three conspicuous ones of which have been elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, It is incontrovertibly axiomatic that technology has been facilitated our life in a way that people have more time and options to do. In fact, thanks to new technology and the development of the Internet, individuals are able to do their tasks from their home, for example, all of us can pay the bill on time instead of going to the bank. Indeed not only do the new technologies ease our life, it has granted us more time to spend, and by having more time, we can spend much of our time on our enjoyments.
Additionally, the economic growth leads to more income and convenient life for human beings. Since the dawn of humanity, people were under perssure to make money and sometimes they had to do severe and time-consuming jobs. However, the economic growth in recent dacades has increased the annual income per person. As a result, people have more money to spend to have more fun namely, going vacations, attending in concerts, going to foreign contries, to name but a few. It stands to reason that the more money available the people enjoy, the more hobbies they would have.
Eventually, people have become aware that they need to have fun in their life. A lot of books and articles have been published which emphasize the necessity of having joyful life for a healthier life. In fact, today, people live a machinery life in which people are under stress and pressure, and in order to release their tension, they should spend time to do their favorable activities. Indeed, these promotions stimulated by scientists have encourage people who do not take their healthy life for granted to spend much time on their joyful activities.
To sum up, nowadays, people spend more time on their enjoyments rather than doing tasks that they should do on the grounds that new technologies have give people more time; economic growth brings about more money to spend; people become aware of importance of happy life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 355, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...l on time instead of going to the bank. Indeed not only do the new technologies ease o...
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Line 6, column 444, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'encouraged'.
Suggestion: encouraged
...romotions stimulated by scientists have encourage people who do not take their healthy li...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, for example, in fact, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90407673861 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65751149994 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47242206235 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9994450581 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.294117647 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5294117647 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76470588235 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2976290102 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116500204797 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0961681003628 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21090481395 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679887758523 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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