People today spent too much time on personal enjoyment "doing things they like do rather than things they should do.
Enjoyment is an important part of usuall works and a lot of people are working because of enjoyment. Considering that enjoying the things that we do has effect on the results of work and also our health condition so nowdays majority of people seeking the things that are not boring. In my view people likes to do jobs or entertainments that are enjoyable for two important reasons.
The main reason is that our working efficiency will be high when we are doing the enjoyment things. When you are doing a jobs or works that you like it, the results will be better because you have focous on that work an you try to do your best. For example, I remember that during my university studies I was good on the cources that I liked but I had worth scores on the boring cources. My major in unversity was Chemical Engineering and so we had some introductory cources such as match, physics which were so boring and my score on them was realy awful. But after three or four terms the essention cources such heat transfer and mass transfer started which were realy interseting and now after about ten years I remember the topics and I like to review them. This experience taught me that during my life I have to seek the works that are interesting and I like them so I will improve my self with them.
Another reason is that, if we enjoy the thing that we do, we will have better promotion and development on that particular thing. Passion and enjoyment have direct relationship, when you enjoy something you will have more passion to do and finish that. For instance, now my working field is environmental issues and I like it. When five years ago I have started working on environmental subjects I didn't have any work experience but now I work for a well-known company in these issues and I have got good position in the company. This example shows that if we do the eorks that we like our promotion will be touchable.
In conclusion, even though some people only do the things that the should do, others think about the enjoyment of works and they want to fo a thing that they like. Promotion in you career and high efficiency in the works that you do will be tangible if you do the things that you like. Finally I think that today we have better world because a lot of people are doing the things that they like.
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- TPO 45 3
- The widespread use of internet has given people access to information on a level never experienced before. How does this increase in availability of information influence life in today’s world. 73
- online encyclopedias 60
- Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TPO_43 the agnostides 75
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...ble if you do the things that you like. Finally I think that today we have better world...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 29.0 11.0286738351 263% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1885.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44575471698 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45046034828 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424528301887 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9769553143 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.882352941 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9411764706 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298283966281 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129038950436 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125282599051 0.0737576698707 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242124682955 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14752821043 0.0645574589148 229% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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