People who cannot accept the criticism from others will not be successful at working in a group

Acception the criticism, an important element of quality work, has been valued and triggers a heated discussion over success at wroking group. Recieving criticism, in some people's views, has no effort on group work. Contrary to these people's opinion is my perspective that acception of criticism is beneficial, due to the contributions to relationships with teammates and working efficiency.

What must be prioritized first is that accepting criticism, instead of ignoring it, will positively influence the the relationships with teammates, by solving problems in short time. To begin with, when someone was criticised, accepting these criticism will benefit for relationships with its colleagues. To be more specific, for example, a polite and modesty teammate is better than a pround and self-righteous teammate, as a cooperator; however, the connection between someone and its teammate will be weaken and easily be broken when it refused to accept. Moreover, ignoring the citicism from the team leader will make people easily to lose their job. In detail, it is unfair for anyone in group who obey the rules and accept the criticism not to get promotion.

What is equally worth discussing is that receving criticism, rather than not, will exert a positive effect on working efficiency. Initially, without taking changes and solving mistakes will negatively impact the development of group work. Specifically, the later proccesses will not be able to move if people refuse to accpet the mistake they took; however, it is more possible for a group to deal with a sequence of tasks if they fix the problem quickly. Aditionally, the average time cost on communication will reduce by the acception of reciving criticism in short time. To explain it further, the more people in the group receving criticism, the less communication time will team take.

Relationships with teammates, with easily to communicate, will improve by solving problems. Working efficiency, fixing problems quickly. will increase by less communication time. To conclude, only by accepting the criticism from others can people successful in a group.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
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Suggestion: the
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
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Line 3, column 238, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this criticism' or 'these criticisms'?
Suggestion: this criticism; these criticisms
... when someone was criticised, accepting these criticism will benefit for relationships with its...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Will
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, so, for example, in short, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1797.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41265060241 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02297265878 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530120481928 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8335638381 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.705882353 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5294117647 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41176470588 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.440081718702 0.236089414692 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142310038451 0.076458572812 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874434573084 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.281469074832 0.150856017488 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032971024732 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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