In modern society the technology improvement lead to different types of entertainment. I disagree that children should not be allowed to play computer games. I have two reasons why I contradict with the following statement.
Firstly, computer games have turned to a trend in our society. Entertainment changes its shape as the time passes. Nowadays the form of entertainment is turned into computer games. For example, in Korea 91 percent of teenagers play computer games. So it has turned to a trend for communication between teenagers. Topic to share ideas and thoughts when communicating.
Secondly, a set amount of time playing computer games could release stress. Stress is a big problem in our current society. Stress leads to more significant problems like health problems. Playing computer games could help to release stress by refreshing people’s minds. Providing entertaining experience for the player. However, when the amount of time playing computer games increases it could not be a refreshment but another source of stress.
In conclusion, children should be allowed to play computer games. This is because computer games have turned to a trend in society and could help relieve stress.
- TPO-12 - Integrated Writing Task Jane Austen (1775-1817) is one of the most famous of all English novelists, and today her novels are more popular than ever, with several recently adapted as Hollywood movies. But we do not have many records of what she lo 66
- Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth century Dutch painters However there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him One such painting is known as attributed to Rembrandt because of its style and 100
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Leadership comes naturally one cannot learn to be a leader Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 80
- Childhood is the happiest time of person s life 60
- Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well 70
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 43.0788530466 23% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1022.0 1977.66487455 52% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 190.0 407.700716846 47% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37894736842 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 4.48103885553 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9517307942 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 212.727598566 49% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552631578947 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 618.680645161 49% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 18.7206748762 48.9658058833 38% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 60.1176470588 100.406767564 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.1764705882 20.6045352989 54% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.82352941176 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400341591154 0.236089414692 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139171320037 0.076458572812 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.17616681314 0.0737576698707 239% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267187799877 0.150856017488 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837121277118 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.31 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.74 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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