Question:
Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Motivating the school-age children has always been a challenge for their parents. Every parent has their own way to reward and motivate their children, but the question of whether it is a good idea that parents offer their children money for each high grade or not has been a topic of controversy. Different responses could be given to this prompt based on the cultural background of the parents. However, as far as I am personally concerned I conspicuously declare that not only offering the children money will soon become a wrong habit for them but also forms a wrong model for them in which they will get the reward of their efforts right after. Also, money has never been a recommended reward for school-age children.
To start with, this kind of rewarding will soon become a habit for children; thus, every time they get a high grade they expect the reward whether they parents think the same or not. This leads children toward trying just for the money and makes it their only incentive to achieve a high grade. For example, when a child is treated like this and given money for every high grade, it becomes a habit for the child and as he grows up his expectation of his parents will grow as well and all this will collapse when the parents cannot afford their child grown appetite for monetary rewards. So this kind of incentive has no advantage but teaching the children a wrong method and habit.
Additionally, paying children for their high grades forms a wrong model for them in which they will get the reward of their efforts right after. A disadvantage of this model is that they learn to expect an immediate reward after every achievement of their life so they do not learn the way real life works in which sometimes they should wait a long time to get to the result of their efforts. Also, this immediate monetary reward approach will easily lessen children eagerness for the education and study itself, instead they just look for the joy the money will bring them. However, it should be the classes and the learning process that they enjoy most.
More importantly, money has never been a recommended reward for school-age children. Therefore, parents should reward the children with books or some electronic learning materials or tools in the same field in which the children have gotten the high grade. These rewards not only motivate the children, but also help them to become better in their lessons and classes for even a higher mark.
To sum up, taking into account the above-mentioned ideas, it is firmly recommended that parents do not offer their school-age children money for their high grades as it will become a wrong habit for them and forms a wrong model which lead to a reduction of their eagerness for the knowledge they learn. It is highly recommended that parents reward the children with books or some electronic learning materials or tools, to avoid all the disadvantage of offering money for the high grades and replace it with lots of positive impacts.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...reward and motivate their children, but the question of whether it is a good idea that parents offer th...
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Line 3, column 153, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'parent'
Suggestion: parent
...ade they expect the reward whether they parents think the same or not. This leads child...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'for example', 'kind of', 'to start with', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.210053859964 0.229887763892 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.147217235189 0.158761421928 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0754039497307 0.0866891130778 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.08078994614 0.046263068375 175% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0825852782765 0.0685040099705 121% => OK
Prepositions: 0.113105924596 0.118717715034 95% => OK
Participles: 0.032315978456 0.0351676179071 92% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.44182006034 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0197486535009 0.0309702414327 64% => OK
Particles: 0.00359066427289 0.00188951952338 190% => OK
Determiners: 0.123877917415 0.0887237588012 140% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0251346499102 0.0209618222197 120% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0143626570916 0.0139019557991 103% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3001.0 2387.08602151 126% => OK
No of words: 520.0 408.028673835 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.77115384615 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48200974243 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.296153846154 0.338922669872 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.201923076923 0.251872472559 80% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.155769230769 0.174417080927 89% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0884615384615 0.112833075102 78% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44182006034 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.392307692308 0.524397521467 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 44.8518634798 59.2087087015 76% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.8888888889 20.5533526081 141% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.5727749613 48.84282405 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.722222222 120.699889404 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8888888889 20.5533526081 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.722222222222 0.644075263715 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 49.0811965812 45.7405998639 107% => OK
Elegance: 1.14450867052 1.45489161554 79% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30515699092 0.300154397459 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.128924269421 0.103427244359 125% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0802160137408 0.0752933317313 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.586148968993 0.497263757937 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.135057726037 0.151897553556 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145144861672 0.114077575197 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063037219105 0.0781384742642 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.438740740605 0.336927656856 130% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0549136964588 0.067059652881 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222525934051 0.210909579961 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292973097619 0.0618886996521 47% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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