There was the time when professionalizing ensured a well-paid job. However, almost every social value has collapsed due to the explosion of technology, especially in education aspect. In my humble opinion, students should prioritize to lay a solid foundation based on the multidimensional comprehension.
In the first place, drawing a comprehensive picture changes student's thinking completely to meet the pace of time. In fact, the rise of the Industrial Revolution resulted in a period in which the combination of assembly line system and specializing of worker was the critical demand to create an epoch that we still call today the golden age of mechanism. On the contrary, the backbones of global economy have no longer the primitive manufacturing but a modern complex manufacturing that requires a combination of comprehensive understands in many fields of life. To become an irreplaceable link in the chain of fresh-born labor, young generation must prioritize building a platform of knowledge in many areas before focusing on their major. For instance, SpaceX - a technology company in field of space exploration - has dreamed a vision that materializes launching human into space with a lowest cost. Indeed, the success of carrier rocket Falcon 9, the first renewable rocket in the course of history, is the most convinced example for demand of owning a multidimensional platform of knowledge. This project motivated each staff to research a series of areas such technology, economy, and law to interact with his/her teammates in a highest level that never seen before. It pointed out that humans are on the way to a new era in which broadening knowledge is the most crucial priority.
On another hand, the explosion of AI (Artificial Intelligence) could change significantly the core platforms that our working aims to. Indeed, AI is on the way replacing human in field of banking and accounting, or even further, in almost every areas of life. In that ideal world, what can we do to feel the life instead becoming a pseudo-naturalistic creature who is led astray from the values of life? In that scenario, human would focus on the values of literature or art. We might learn more about the masterpieces which once shaped the civilization. For example, the project Asgardia of a Russian billionaire is planned to build an independent nation in outer space. It is estimated to provide about 200,000 positions to become an Asgardian who owns the abilities to build a new world in case the Earth faced its apocalypse due to the internal and external hazards. Hence, having a wide range of knowledge is absolutely an advantage. Last but not least, we might not have to wait for so long when scientists discovered an elixir of life to prolong human age. The gift of an incredible longevity is to use for mastering every aspect we concern. Therefore, it is no doubt that people, especially the youth, have to prepare a right conception of learning in a large number of subjects.
In conclusion, enriching knowledge in many fields is the best way to optimize the efficiency of working. It is also the way human have to evolve in the future. Therefore, I strongly encourage student to master the platform of multidimensional knowledge.
- Some people believe that the qualities a person needs to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 89
- Do you agree or disagree with the statement: “Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past? 73
- The money spent by governments on space programs would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 61
- The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals To what extent do you agree or disagree 80
- Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. 61
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 116, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ng completely to meet the pace of time. In fact, the rise of the Industrial Revolu...
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Line 4, column 890, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...ializes launching human into space with a lowest cost. Indeed, the success of car...
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Line 4, column 1235, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...w to interact with his/her teammates in a highest level that never seen before. ...
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Line 6, column 1260, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...epare a right conception of learning in a large number of subjects. In conclusion, enriching k...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, on the contrary, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 91.0 52.1666666667 174% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2714.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 533.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09193245779 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12422288355 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 298.0 212.727598566 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559099437148 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 875.7 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8612327463 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.56 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.32 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.48 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100196834468 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0284123145938 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415418837733 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0648991245356 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221948357816 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 86.8835125448 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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