Once considered as articles that few people had access to, smartphones have become a vital part of everyone's lives. However, it is known that we are getting in touch with this new technology ever earlier, and it is not hard to see young children with one of those in their hands. This premature contact can be harmful to children’s life, leading them to illnesses, affecting their school performance and also being a dangerous environment for young children. In light of this, this essay will explain why I agree with parents that forbid young children from owing smartphones.
First, in instead of giving smartphones to their children, parents should motivate them for real human interactions and sports practice. This behavior can lead children to illnesses like obesity, anxiety and depression, stimulating laziness and individualism, which will affect them doing their growth. For example, my neighbors have a 4-year-old daughter and since she was born, she has a cellphone to distract her. She has troubles to interact with her classmates and has serious problems of anxiety, result of her parent’s behavior.
Second, if children are given access to these smartphones at school age, it may interfere in them study performance. Since these phones can connect to the Internet, students might get distracted by games and online content. For instance, a student is distracted with the Internet may receive grades that are worse than their usual performance. When I was in my senior year, many of my colleagues didn’t pain attention in class because of excessive smartphone use, which resulted in lower scores, decreasing their chances to go to a good university. If this can affect teenagers, which are more mature, imagine what an excessive use can do with young children.
As last, children don’t have the maturity to distinguish which is true or not. Give a smartphone with internet access to a child is a double-edged weapon. It can keep young children in touch with their parents; however, it can also be a real danger for them if they use it to talk to strangers. We constantly watch in television reports about pedophiles who use fake internet accounts to communicate with children, and these situations continue to occur.
In conclusion, these are one of many reasons why parents should forbid young children from owing smartphones. Although the fact that a smartphone can allow control, it can also be an open door for illnesses, decrease in school performance and threaten the safety of these children. Technology has not only brought good things, we should use it wisely, but it is parent’s responsibility to know what is good or bad for their children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 542, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., result of her parent's behavior. Second, if children are given access to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2264.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15717539863 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90964986533 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530751708428 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.2825404679 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.2 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.95 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224426594188 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762639186676 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433052734962 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137965508778 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317101306802 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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