TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

It is known that educate a child is not an easy task. However, educate a child in the contemporary world has become an even harder task than it was before, especially due to the technology development. The amount of time those children spend being exposed to smartphones, internet and media content can be extremely harmful, especially because they are inevitably getting in touch with these technologies earlier than they should. This premature exposure can result in illnesses like obesity, anxiety and unhealth behaviors, especially if we remind that children are not mature enough to control the technology use, wasting a lot of time online and enjoying less time offline, as well as exposing themselves to a virtual world that could be extremely dangerous to them, all things that didn’t happen in the past. In light of this, this essay will explain why I think educating children nowadays is harden than in the past.
First, if adults have problems controlling their internet use, imagine the effect with children. The excessive use of smartphones and social media can develop harmful habits for children’s lives, habits that they might take with them during their growth. When I was a child, my development in school was decreasing and only after a while that my parents found out that it was happening because I could not see the board. I developed myopia and had to start using glasses, everything as result of my excessive exposure.
Second, with the time children spend online, they could be practicing exercises, interacting with other children or even having a better night of sleep. Internet makes time pass faster, and children are not mature enough to measure how much time they spend online. I remember that my mother gave me a video game and I spent an entire day playing, I did not even stop take a shower, which with the pass of time, made me gain weight.
As last, internet is a huge parallel world. The contact between people are way much easier and, consequently, more dangerous. Everyone can be anonymous in Internet, which make easier to pedophiles get in touch with children. I had a 12-year-old neighbor who met a guy in the internet and when she went to meet him, he was actually a 54-year-old man.
To sum up, these are one of the main reasons why I agree with the fact that it is harder to educate children nowadays than in the past. However, I think that parents should be more concerned about introduce this kind of technology so soon, and should monitor their children, once they are not mature enough to distinguish what is good or not for them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 904, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'hardened'.
Suggestion: hardened
... I think educating children nowadays is harden than in the past. First, if adults hav...
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Line 5, column 52, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
...these are one of the main reasons why I agree with the fact that it is harder to educate children nowada...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, well, while, i think, kind of, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2152.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84684684685 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63820564929 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540540540541 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.9480816816 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.555555556 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238330656323 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755562451911 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463801787816 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12547425791 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468952372716 0.0645574589148 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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