Smartphones, once a symbol of wealth and luxury have now become a commonplace item. Nowadays, it is not uncommon to see young kids playing games online and watching movies on their smartphones instead of going out and playing with their friends. Such an obsession with these devices may not bode well for the development of young children for many reasons.
Kids these days tend to spend a lot of time on their smart devices and do not get any physical exercise. Such dependency on smartphones creates a multitude of problems for the kids - they do not learn how to make friends or how to act in a social environment, they do not know how to behave in class. Not only that, but it also has adverse effects on children's' health such as obesity. For example, my brother has allowed his son to use a smartphone since he was seven years old. He uses this smartphone every day, and when taken away from him starts throwing tantrums. He does not know how to properly behave in class and gets reprimanded by his teachers every day. Since he got his smart device, he has stopped playing physical games with his friends leading to him becoming obese.
Another reason why many parents forbid their kids from owning a smartphone is because of the distraction that they provide. For example, during my high school, a lot of my classmates were introduced to smartphones. Most of them were easily distracted by the allure of losing themselves in online games or chatting with people on online forums such as Reddit or Facebook. Because of this, the grades of a lot of students in my class dropped that year, decreasing their chances of getting into a good University. If smartphones could have such adverse effects on teenagers, one can only imagine how much more of a destructive role they would play on younger kids.
While some parents think that smartphones are an important tool to keep in touch with their children, they do not realise the double-edged nature of their decision. We see examples on the news where strangers and pedophiles target younger children who are online. Most of us have at least once been the target of scam pop-up ads on the internet which when clicked leads to phishing sites. Giving young children devices that have access to the internet is very dangerous in the absence of constant parental guidance.
While smartphones may seem to be useful in tracking the whereabouts of one's children and keeping in touch with them; there are several downsides in giving young children access to smartphones. Hence, I strongly believe that young children should not have access to smartphones.
- TPO-29 - Integrated Writing Task Large numbers of dinosaur fossils have been discovered in deposits on Alaska's North Slope, a region that today experiences an extremely cold,arctic climate. One hundred million years ago, when those dinosaurs were alive, 85
- Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why? 97
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 72, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...e useful in tracking the whereabouts of ones children and keeping in touch with them...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, well, while, at least, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2163.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.828125 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59200855337 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540178571429 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.42379602 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52380952381 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234570016804 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671388588531 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708824862194 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139012156503 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685928141351 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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