If we do not care about our world who will do that? We, the humans, are the ones who have been killing our planet and putting in danger every piece of life on it. As far as I am concerned, human activity has had a great negative impact on the earth rather than makes it a better habitat. I cling to this outlook because of two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, humans have created uncountable environmentally damaging problems on earth, they cannot see what they are doing is becoming our planet less inhabitable. The way human pollute has reached the peak, everything they eat, they throw away contaminating rivers, ecosystems, and killing thousands of species. We should be aware of this and spread worthwhile beliefs in order to make people appreciate our nature and our earth. For instance, some weeks ago, authorities in my city in joint with environmentalists invited the people to gather in the central park because they wanted to explain how humans are killing marine and land species just by throwing garbage. People could see images, video, and more stuff related to this problem. At the end of the exposition, they were asked whether they wanted to follow in the same way or to change. Talking with people, later on, I was really happy because they told me how they were going to contribute to the environment so as to turn it in a good place.
Secondly, industrialization has brought with it a lot of suffering for nature because of the chemically danger gases factories release, those gases could not be really bad for nature but for humans, so we are killing ourselves and our planet. For example, my friend from the US came to my house and told me that he was undergoing many diseases due to the toxic gases he breath in his job. He works in a car manufacturer, and every day he needs to improve or create cars by adding in anyway toxic substances on the motor in order to make them work. Besides, he showed me pictures which depicted the factory releasing lots of black gases to the atmosphere, how could not it affect our planet?
In conclusion, There is no doubt that the human hand has been harming the planet by some ways such as throwing away garbage and releasing toxic gases to the air contaminating it as well. I strongly believe that human activity’s negative impact outweighs the positive one.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 975, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... going to contribute to the environment so as to turn it in a good place. Secondly, i...
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Line 5, column 481, Rule ID: IN_ANYWAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'in any way'?
Suggestion: in any way
...eds to improve or create cars by adding in anyway toxic substances on the motor in order ...
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Line 5, column 673, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'affects'?
Suggestion: affects
...ses to the atmosphere, how could not it affect our planet? In conclusion, There is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, besides, but, first, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, first of all, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1958.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68421052632 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66332740797 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562200956938 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4572860572 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.176470588 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5882352941 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5294117647 5.45110844103 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142115115187 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048358455473 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565211830684 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0909356410038 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483163401917 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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