Some people believe that it is good idea for the athletes and entertainers to go into politics while others think that professional athletes and entertainers should not become politicians Which do you agree with and why | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some people believe that it is good idea for the athletes and entertainers to go into politics, while others think that professional athletes and entertainers should not become politicians. Which do you agree with and why?

Nowadays, politics is becoming an interesting era because of not only its profound effects on global trends but also it could act as a tool to money and power. So, it would stimulate lots of people from different categories including athletes to enter to it. There is no doubt that athletes due to their reputation could popular acceptance to win the election but I think it wouldn’t be a good idea that athletes act as a politician. My reasons are presented in fallowing paragraphs.
firstly, there is no similar and reasonable area between politics and athletics to justify athletes take apart in politics. politics is a complex and interdisciplinary field that relate to many subject including politics, economics, management, relationship science, end even psychology so being master in that require continuous academic and practical efforts in aforementioned fields. Politics and athletes both do their best for nation interest, but in different ways. Politics should make an effort to design national strategies, rolling the country, making diplomatic relationships with other nations based on mutual benefits, improving public welfare, establishing public regulatory and security, etc... far from those subjects athletes already faced with. Besides, due to the generality of ecosystem that politic encompass, each mistake could cause a profound disaster that couldn’t be retrieve the situation, so choosing a person who has appropriate knowledge and expertise is a requisite.
Besides, nobody couldn’t deny the fact that popularity is requisite for being succeed in politics, but it isn’t mean that every famous people like athletes would be qualified for politics. Their reputation isn’t in same type, it would be possible people recognize athletes as an influencer for some sort of social activity but it will be temporal and partial, On the other side politician make influence nationally or globally. Since athletes’ impacts is just devoted to their society, they won’t be a suitable selection for such positions that are pervasive. So, their effectiveness won’t be such equal to give a motivation to athletes that they can be successful in politics.
Consequently, it seems to me it wouldn’t be an interesting idea for athletes to inter into politics. Since politics require some skills that specialized to those one who majored in it and have an extensive knowledge and experience around politics. Furthermore, athlete’s penetration on society is different from politicians, so their productivity won’t be the same.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, i think, no doubt, sort of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2163.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50381679389 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07916849324 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577608142494 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 689.4 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.191700355 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.235294118 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1176470588 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70588235294 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234388208055 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843091740322 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534867382014 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150782189921 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0170348901847 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 58.1214874552 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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