Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
It is no secret that relationship between children and their parents affects children's personality strongly. However, it is still a controversial argument that how they should spend their time together and it has been always a dilemma that whether they should play games in this time or it is better to spend this time on schoolwork. It is my firm belief that parents should not waste this time on getting involved with their children's educational issues and I will elaborate on this in the subsequent paragraphs.
The most important fact to be mentioned is that playing games and sports have the most crucial effect on children's social abilities. They understand how to cope with their parents as their game partner or competitor, how to be gentle when they win the games and how to control their sadness when they lose it. They recognize the value of friendship and kindness and how aggressive reaction can destroy the principle of the games. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in elementary school I used to become sad easily, as soon as I made some mistakes in my school exams. I did not used to care what my mistake was and how should I have solved it and I just used to start crying immediately. My mother understood this and she started playing a game in which I was not looser when I made mistakes, each mistake was a new solution to find out the secret of the game. Finally, I become stronger and I could accept my mistakes and tried to learn from them.
Another equally important fact to be mentioned is that playing games with children makes a powerful friendship between them and their families. From my vantage point, nothing can make parents and their children closer than playing a game or sport and as a result, fathers and mothers will be the first secret keeper and advisor of their children when they face some problems. As statistics show, parents who play more games with their children are mostly aware of the problems which they are engaged with and they can lead their children easier.
Finally but not less importantly, getting involved with schoolwork can mislead children due to the fact that parents are not usually aware of the details of each lesson or each school project since science is improving rapidly in the contemporary era and their information is not always up to date. Thus, they start teaching their children wrongly and this will influence children’s knowledge adversely.
All in all, however, it is very significant for parents to spend time with their children, in my opinion it is not wise to get involved in their schoolwork in this limited time, while playing games and sports enables them to improve their children personality and make deeper friendship between them.
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- Independent writing TPO 51 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 610, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'use'
Suggestion: use
... mistakes in my school exams. I did not used to care what my mistake was and how sho...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...hey can lead their children easier. Finally but not less importantly, getting invol...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, so, still, thus, while, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2289.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82911392405 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5734566015 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449367088608 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.4450179763 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.647058824 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8823529412 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94117647059 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273322365935 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0956108172871 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624435575651 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172103524025 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550793729523 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.