By and large, the importance of parent's role in developing the children's personality is undeniable. Spending some quality time with children, special by busy parents whom are not available often, can have astonishing results. There are a plethora of people who are in conviction that this time should be spent for playing and making fun moments while others hold an opposite point of view asserting that this time should be devoted to school work and practice. To the extent that my personal perspective is concerned, I accord with the first group. Among countless reasons that give adherence to my personal perspective, I delve into the most important ones in what follows.
First I believe that making good memories and spending some quality time with children is necessary since it helps to promote their self-confidence. For instance the only memories that are stuck in my head since I was 5 years old till I was 14 or 15, the rest is pretty clear and vivid in my head actually, are the ones I spent with my parents playing. The memories of my first bike riding are still as colorful as the day that they happened and were never to be dwindled. As a matter of fact my father passed away when I was 10, and what would I have now if he would have spent all that time teaching me math. All I was supposed to learn could be easily handled through my teachers, I mean what good are they if they can't do that anyway, and what I really needed was the laugh of my father and mother. The safety I felt in those moments gave me the confidence to be more innovative and confident.
Secondly, the fun is contagious as well as sorrow is and the joy of engaging in parent-child activities is absolutely incomparable to any other feelings. The moments which will not be brought back to u and the seconds which could have been spent into monotonous activities like doing homework can easily be spend to make fabulous moments for both parents and children. Most people miss the point that these kind of activities have two side and parents can benefit from it as much as children do. Now that I have 2 child and spent most of my time traveling to country side, which deprives me from having a lot of free time to spend with my children, know for sure that whenever i spend my free time at home, playing with my children, I'm fully charged and ready to work more efficiently the day after.
In conclusion, the little time parents have must be spent playing with their children rather than anything else. For only good memories we possess as we grow old.
- Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is much easier for people to achieve success without their family members’ help now than in the past? 90
- It is better to take a secure job with a low pay than to take a job with a high pay but is easy to lose 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?After high school, students should have at least one year to work or travel.It's better than attending university straight away. 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 83
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 563, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had spent'?
Suggestion: had spent
...was 10, and what would I have now if he would have spent all that time teaching me math. All I w...
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Line 3, column 719, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...hers, I mean what good are they if they cant do that anyway, and what I really neede...
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Line 4, column 402, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...ildren. Most people miss the point that these kind of activities have two side and parents...
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Line 4, column 515, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'child' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'children'.
Suggestion: children
... much as children do. Now that I have 2 child and spent most of my time traveling to ...
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Line 4, column 678, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...y children, know for sure that whenever i spend my free time at home, playing wit...
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Line 4, column 734, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...time at home, playing with my children, Im fully charged and ready to work more ef...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, anyway, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for instance, i mean, in conclusion, kind of, as a matter of fact, as well as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56331877729 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50670236746 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.0277037323 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.941176471 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9411764706 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.45110844103 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291460056687 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961362480138 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894604256159 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192926819876 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483539761781 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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