Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern world, the pace of life is so much fast that everyone is in the lack of time. this issue has led to many problems, such as enormous pressure on each person, lower fewer social activities and so forth. parents are not exceptions, more and more families are facing problems because of busy life, and parents have not enough time to spend with their children. In this situation, children become bored and do not know what to do. while some people believe that children should use this time to have fun and play games, others believe otherwise. I, personally speaking, support the second notion that children should use this time in a useful way like doing their homework or other schoolwork. The reasons for holding this belief are manifold, some of which will be outlined in the following.
First and foremost, it is clear to everyone that in today's competitive world, having a high level of education is very vital for every individual. today, almost all kinds of jobs need education, and a person without a good education cannot do anything in the workplace. Furthermore well-payed jobs absolutely need a very well educated person, for example, engineering or medicine needs at least a bachelor's degree from a university. Therefore, children should concentrate on their schoolwork rather than playing or other fun stuff. Indeed, the cornerstone of a successful education is primary education, and this determines how successful a student will be. without enough knowledge of basic concepts in Math, English literature, Biology, it becomes very difficult for a student to continue his or her education at a higher level. As a result, they cannot reach the successes that they deserve.
The second noteworthy point about the time that parents are busy and cannot spend time with their children is that doing schoolwork does not disturb parents too. playing games or sports always makes a lot of noise, which could be very bothering to the parents, while they are trying to concentrate on their work. Yet, usually, doing homework, or studying are very calm activities which rarely disturbs others. In fact, if parents have time do they would spend it with their children, so they have to work and focus on a particular issue, and making noise is the worst thing for them. A personal example could drive this notion home. my older brother has a little son, who is only four years old. I saw many times that when my brother was very busy and could not play with his son, the son got upset. And he began to play in the home and make a lot of noise which disturbed my brother a lot. but if he only starts to read a story or do his homework, everything could be fine.
In conclusion, having considered the aforementioned reasons and examples in mind, doing things that are related to school is better than playing sports or doing a fun thing, when parents are really busy. Not only do they improve their grades in the schools which help them to continue their education, but also it does not bother their parents. I hope that one day, every parent has enough time to spend with their children instead of only working.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, really, second, so, therefore, well, while, at least, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2601.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 541.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80776340111 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48934438407 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500924214418 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 801.9 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9256612094 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.038461538 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8076923077 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415754935692 0.236089414692 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108380973615 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11609916306 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257638359962 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125123570318 0.0645574589148 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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