Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, work has been increasingly occupying the time of people in modern society, resulting in the decrease of time to spend with our family. When it comes to how to make the best of the valuable time parents get to stay together with their children, some people believe they should play games or sports to have fun, while others argue that they should do things related to schoolwork. As far as I am concerned, it is preferable for parents to have fun with kids for the following reasons.
To begin with, playing together will help to bond parents and children. Since parents are mostly busy and not around, it is inevitable that kids feel distant from and even afraid of them every now and then. Using the leisure time to play with children is a good way to show them via action that dad and mom love you and are willing to keep you company and make you happy as long as we have the chance. For example, if parents go to swim with their children in precious spare time, they can encourage kids to overcome the fear of water and offer a hand when needed. Moreover, they can make harmless jokes on each other by playing water and laugh together. This way the kids will feel the care and love from father and mother, hence realize that they are not cold and far away. However, if parents prefer to do homework with kids, they might regard parents the same as teachers, strict and hard to get close with. As we can see, the distance between parents and children is shortened and the ties are tightened through having fun rather than doing schoolwork together.
Moreover, attending games and sports are beneficial to the comprehensive development of children. Not only parents but also young kids are under the heavy burden of work. Children need to deal with lots of schoolwork themselves when parents are usually not around. Since school normally stresses heavily on students’ scores while tends to neglect the cultivation of other abilities, they actually do not have many opportunities to get away from their study desk to touch and explore the world. Parents taking kids out to play might improve the situation. To illustrate this with the same example in the paragraph above, children who go to swim with parents learn how to swim, which can strengthen their bodies, bond them with other kids in the swimming pool, even save their lives in the face of danger. On the contrary, if parents also urge kids to study in the scarce spare time, children are confined in a small room for the sake of grades and deprived of the privilege to acquire other abilities such as swimming, social and saving one’s own life. Therefore, the all-round development of children is achieved by doing games or sports instead of schoolwork with parents together.
Some people might claim that children need help with homework, thus justifies that parents should spend spare time doing so with kids. This view overlooks the function and potential of various resources available, such as teachers, classmates, textbooks and the Internet. Since children can resort to these, parents do not have to sacrifice the hard-won chances to bond with kids and nourish them in an all-round way for schoolwork.
To put it in a nutshell, as the time to spend with children is more and more precious in the current, how to make the best of it has become a focus of parents. After weighing the pros and cons of the two approaches, I think it is safe to conclude that playing with kids is a better choice.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 187, Rule ID: EVERY_NOW_AND_THEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
...el distant from and even afraid of them every now and then. Using the leisure time to play with ch...
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Line 4, column 397, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an all-round way" with adverb for "all-round"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...nces to bond with kids and nourish them in an all-round way for schoolwork. To put it in a nutshel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, i think, such as, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 107.0 52.1666666667 205% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2878.0 1977.66487455 146% => OK
No of words: 610.0 407.700716846 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71803278689 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96972615649 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43152059307 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465573770492 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 860.4 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.51792114695 341% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.7849330463 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.916666667 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4166666667 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423667262937 0.236089414692 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115857454466 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0924314371027 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260702930716 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110134671622 0.0645574589148 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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