Some people believe that the quality time parents spend with their children should be spent on works related to school like encouraging their children to do their homework or helping them with their school works. However, I disagree with this point of view. There are a few reasons for which I believe parents should spend their free time playing games or sports with children rather than doing school related works. I will elaborate on my point of view in the following paragraphs.
First of all, schools often apply pressure on students to do their homework and focus on studying. Hence, students' home should be a place which they can relax, have fun and also study at the right time. And what guarantee such an appropriate place for children, is their parent behavior. Therefore, I think that instead of increasing the pressure on children by emphasizing on school works, parents should participate in fun activities with their sons and daughters, in order to help them relax and obtain enough energy to do their school work later. For instance, I can recall my own childhood. Everyday after school my parents took me to the park and played with me for hours, and when we arrived home I was a satisfied, happy child who could easily do her homework. Consequently, I was always the top student in my class which I owe it to my parents. In other words, I believe that having fun and playing is equally important as studying which also directly affect the quality of studying time.
Secondly, most children hate to always obey various rules parents set. Therefore, a characteristic is often observable in children which they prefer to do stuff on their own rather than when parents ask them to. They want to see their parents as their friends by their side rather than their school teachers' side. To illustrate, most of my friends which their parents interfered in their studying process were not good students with high grades. However, those who studied independently and used to spend time with parents for having fun were also better students with higher grades.
In summation, by considering the adverse effects of parents interfering in their children studies by applying different rules at home, and the pressure that school work has on students, it is obviously a better choice for parents to spend their free time playing and having fun with their sons and daughters.
- TPO 53 Integrated Writing Tasks 68
- Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. 73
- TPO 53 Integrated Writing Tasks 68
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 597, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: Every day
...nstance, I can recall my own childhood. Everyday after school my parents took me to the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i think, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1982.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90594059406 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50238098558 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480198019802 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.9713345187 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.111111111 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4444444444 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27777777778 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352078813491 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117872687137 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0981016589237 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250088091329 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473675565264 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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