Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Spending time with parents are very important for children of all age. It is especially true for infants and small children, the more stimulation they get, the more improved intellectual capacity they will have, whereas lack of parental attention may cause developmental delay. Although the need for the time spent together decreases with age, adolescents and young adults can widely benefit from guidance of their parents.
But how should the families spend their time together? An obligatory educational program exists in many countries, consisting more of theorethical knowledge. Together with the homeworks, the time spent for school thus theory consumes a lot of time. Children need games and sports too, to have more aspects, to develop their physical abilities, simply to grow up. Creating this time would be more beneficial for both parents and children, considering they have very small time together. As spending more time on schoolwork will increase their mental abilities in an uncertain amount, however, it won't improve them any other ways for sure.
Games and sports improve socialising, not only with the other people, but also between each other of the individuals in families. Through activity related to fun, parents and children can relax, share more, and get closer to each other. Children can see their parents someone else than a warden, a guardian, but more human, a person whom they would like to share moments and be together.
Everyone, regardless of age, is busy nowadays. Deciding on what to do in the very small time spent together is crucial for most of the families. Having fun is the most efficient way in terms of development of children, and also communication between them and families.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, may, so, thus, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 43.0788530466 32% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1452.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 279.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20430107527 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66245765644 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5770609319 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.74216904 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306501149199 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115828054796 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655521850788 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186870318229 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584072280005 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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