Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records. Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Every day we experience some new things which can help us to have a better life in the future. In my point of view, we should not forget our experience because they have a positive impact on our life. therefore, I prefer uploading my own experience on social sites to get a positive energy from my family, and give some helpful information to people who want to travel or immigrate. this essay is going to explain these two reasons.
First, I have been living in a foreign country for five years. In addition, I have not seen my relatives in a real world since then. my family always worry about my feeling, so whenever I go somewhere I take a large number of pictures to send them. I have a big family, so if I share my photos to each of them separately, definitely it will take more time. I prefer uploading my pictures on instagram. it has two benefits for me, at first I can confirm my all relatives on my conditions. Besides, I receive a huge number of friendly comments from them which makes me happy, and helps me to less missing. For instance, last month when I was in a horrible situation, I uploaded a picture on instagram showing my bad circumstance. Fortunately, my relatives became aware. they started calling me, and gave useful advices to me which I used them to manage my feeling and my situation. I can say, that photo rescued me, and I could handle my bad circumstance.
Second, when I go anywhere, I just try to know their cultures and their special rules. Also, when I visit historical places or famous restaurants or places, I get information on that place. therefore, I always write some new information on my page while I upload the picture of that place. As a result, I am sure this information can help people to learn new things. Additionally, people who want to travel to foreign countries can use my experience and my information to avoid doing something wrong. it gives me a good feeling, and encourages me to share my information to help others. last year when I went to nepal, I tried their local food while I went to some traditional restaurants. I made a list from restaurants there with high or low quality alongside their prices. I uploaded my list on social sites which that list helped a couple who went to nepal two months after me. I am really happy that I could help people.
Although some people do not like to share their experience on social sites, I firmly believe that uploading our experience can help us to get a positive energy, and it helps other to use our experience in their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, really, second, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 92.0 43.0788530466 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2079.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50976138829 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70260755495 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492407809111 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 25.0 9.59856630824 260% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8703656459 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.9615384615 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7307692308 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15384615385 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182798303464 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541777394604 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671311746536 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149547489288 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694006448326 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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