Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social networking sites Other people prefer not to create such records Which approach do you prefer and why Use specific reasons and examples to supp | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Currently, the development of the Internet, camera and a softwre, Photeshop, provides people with various ways to recording their own experiences. A glance at people's attitude towards the way they share their own experience brings to a light question, namely, whether people should upload their pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Were I forced to choose, I prefer to upload the information, and I will elaborate on my reasons in the following essay.

The first reason worth mentioning is that sharing picture or other information on the Internet enable people to enlarge their social circle. To be specific, the information people upload to the Internet, probably, would attract people who have the same hobby. In this case, people would more likely to make more new friends who would directly or indirectly contribute to their future development. This point is better illustrated by the example of one of my friends, a basketball amateur. When he was at primary school, he often struggled from lacking friends to play basketball with. But everything changed after he shared a video about shooting ball in the Internet. The video attracted a wealth of basketball fans for him and some of them still stay in touch with him, which shows the benefit of sharing own experiences on the website.

Moreover, sharing one's own experience to social network, more often than not, facilitates people to memorize the experiences, which might be inspiration for people in the future, better. Take myself as an example. My parents took me to Xinjiang, a picturesque place located in Northwestern of China. Since having the interest of taking pictures and the sceneries are quite unique and unforgetable, I uploaded the picture I took on the Internet. This might seem useless and unintentional untill I lose an important ball game. It were those beautiful pictures relieved my pressure and lifed my spirit at that time.

In conclusion, drawing upon what I have mentioned above, I strongly advocate that uploading records about people's own experiences to the Internet is better since people could not only meet more new friends, but memorize the impressive moments better.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, so, still, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1837.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21875 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86881605642 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576704545455 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0177224401 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.058823529 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7058823529 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.94117647059 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309185294707 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866808680501 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848590387533 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193808642192 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806960736608 0.0645574589148 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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