Some people prefer to travel to tourist spots with many people. While others prefer less crowded ones.Which do you prefer and why?
Nowadays, traveling has played an increasingly important role in people’s life. When people go for a scenic spot to visit, tourist attractions that enjoy the most prestige have always received a big crowd of visitors. However, from my perspective, as there are too many people causing undesirable experience, they may not be attractive at all. Instead, those with only a handful of visitors are more preferable.
To begin with, more money and time can be saved by those who visit places with fewer people. In other words the money and time you spend in the popular spot will be more. To be more specific, this is mainly because when many people flood into one place at the same time, they will spend more time waiting in the line. Besides, the cost,such as accommodation, food and tickets during the travel, will be intentionally increased, because everyone knows that those places are popular and well-developed, and they are the top priorities when people make the decision about where to visit. However, if people choose a place with fewer tourists, problems above will not be so annoying. For example, in China, most hotels will raise the price of booking a room on holidays especially in popular scenic spots as a convention. The price of a single room will be about 40 percent higher than that as usual. What’s worse, at some places with great popularity, visitors are likely to wait for more than two hours to have a glance at the scenic spot. As a result, plenty of people are willing to travel to a less crowded place.
Secondly, people certainly feel comfortable when a landscape is not packed with tourists. This means that if they visit a place with fewer travelers, they can slow down their speed and pace, appreciating the beautiful landmark or buildings. Spending more time on the scenic spots can help to cultivate a better and deeper understanding about travel and people can truly feel the happiness and joy of travel. In addition, when taking a photograph, no strangers will intrude into the picture, or there will be no unwelcome people in the background. It is certainly pleasant that one can take good pictures without disturbances. Take my last visit to the Forbidden City which was a delightful experience as an example. I enjoyed a fantastic time because the visit was not during the busy season when there are numerous tourists. I took a number of marvelous pictures of the gorgeous scenes with no one’s intrusion into the view. Apart from that, the staff there were patient and friendly since there were not sufficient number of tourists pressuring them. Fortunately, I was offered a favorable reception and it also turns out that service at the tourist attractions can be satisfactory when only limited number of visitors occur.
To sum up, since money and time could be saved and better traveling experience provided, it is absolute to draw a conclusion that it is more beneficial to travel to places with fewer people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , such
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, apart from, for example, in addition, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2462.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90438247012 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69011347872 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503984063745 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 780.3 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4981684613 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.583333333 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9166666667 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70833333333 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19199013458 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631924512027 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459439833071 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125758686324 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416072333524 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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