Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Agree or disagree?
As time goes on, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of the Internet on people's lives. While some people believe constant bombardment of much information via the Internet has numerous disadvantages and is not useful, on the other extreme of the rope, the overwhelming majority of people think that our lives depend on the Internet. Although both sides take their positions, personally speaking, I deeply think the second group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will cogently explain my reasons to justify my points of view.
As the first and paramount reason, the Internet provides an incredible volume of valuable information which develops people's knowledge. In other words, people gain much information on different websites, expand their horizons, and be productive and creative in their fields of activity and work. Take my experience as a valuable example. Last month, I completed a project about quality control and needed some data; thus, I searched many websites to obtain useful and practical information about statistical graphs. Those websites helped me find viable solutions with splendid ideas and propose rational and pragmatic approaches to deal efficiently with various problems and unprecedented challenges. Therefore, without access to the Internet, not only could I not expand my horizons, analyze various data, but also I couldn’t develop a long-term strategy to fulfill my tasks properly and effectively.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is information that obtained from the Internet can help us find numerous job opportunities. To be more specific, nowadays, with the galloping growth rate of science and technology, various companies advertise their factories and offer several job opportunities on different websites. Hence, we can find our favorite jobs on these sites. For instance, empirical research conducted by some master students and professional business experts at a university shows many graduated students have found their jobs on the Internet. They know that websites have many advertisements, and announce and offer different jobs, especially in June for college’s students. Consequently, they can see various factories and communicate with many manufacturers on the Internet and obtain essential information that they need and choose the best job.
In conclusion, the Internet can improve our performance and productivity, and develop our knowledge and abilities by providing new insights an experiences. Moreover, many websites on the Internet offer various job opportunities that we can consider and choose them in the blink of an eye.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 141, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an experience' or simply 'experiences'?
Suggestion: an experience; experiences
...and abilities by providing new insights an experiences. Moreover, many websites on the Interne...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2254.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53808353808 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06983751162 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574938574939 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 703.8 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5230970283 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.222222222 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6111111111 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225487579657 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683379978989 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734692010307 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138891265929 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772904518943 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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