Some people think that it is an important part of child's education to go field trip(for example, museums), other people think a child's time is better spent learning in classroom at school.What is your opinion?
Nowadays, due to the fierce competition in our society, parents attach greater importance on children's education. Some people claim that learning in classroom benefits more to children's education than taking them to field trip since students can focus more time on what has been printed on their textbooks. However, in my opinion,it's preferable to take children to a field trip.
To begin with, with the purpose of education, going field trip provides an excellent way for teachers to attract students to concentrate on their study. If teachers always impart knowledge in classroom, students would find it boring in a short period time, and even lose their interest on study. Sleeping in class or chatting with classmates are not surprising, which definitely lead to a poor academic performance. On the contrary, students would feel excited to go to field trip. They would spend more time on study and search information in books or the Internet to facilitate their study actively instead of being passive receptacles of knowledge. For example, I still remembered last semester after our history teacher decided to take us to visit a military museum, my classmates and I all spare no efforts to search information about the museum and the history presented in the museum. By this way, we all have a good command of the history of that period and can recall them clearly now. Needless to say,the approach of going field trip is beneficial to students.
In addition, students can grasp solid knowledge and skills through a field trip. During the trip, not only would the teachers pass the knowledge to us, but also students can learn from each other through discussing with their partners. For one thing, students can obtain thorough understanding when they are discussing with their classmates. In the process of discussing, everyone can presents their own ideas and think in their unique ways. Thus, students will view the topic from different perspective, which broaden their own knowledge. For another, discussion renders students an opportunity to practice communication skills. They will learn to be a good listener and the effective ways to express their ideas. Through discussing, students's communication skills would upgrade, which constitutes a stepping stone of their future professional success. Therefore, we can see that it is of great importance for students to take part in a field trip to equip knowledge and skills better.
It is true that studying in classroom is a effective way for students to learn. However, what can be learn in classrooms are limited after all. So from what has been discussed above, I draw a conclusion that field trip is a necessary part of children's education.
- Some people think that it is an important part of child's education to go field trip(for example, museums), other people think a child's time is better spent learning in classroom at school.What is your opinion? 83
- Schools should be more focused on improving facilities(libraries, computers, or labs) for students than on hiring famous professors. 70
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, after all, for example, in addition, for one thing, in my opinion, it is true, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2273.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15419501134 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79511549788 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9952738424 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8260869565 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1739130435 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201425673194 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617401914044 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478941692907 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138740720532 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031625842941 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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