Some people think that older children should be required to take care of the younger children. Others think that this should be done by parents or other adults. Which do you prefer?
Taking care of children is a challenging, time and energy consuming matter for parents especially who are having older ones. Opinions are divided as to whether looking after of young children must be handled by their own older siblings or parents or other adults have to shoulder this great responsibility. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that the benefits of sibling maintenance are more than that of other seniors. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
The first thing coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that looking after of kids by their older brother or sister is a great practice for them to take over a responsibility and it will make them ready for their hectic future life. It goes without saying that living at the present time and especially in the future would be more demanding and people will be under tremendous amount of responsibilities. Needless to say, it is a parental duty to pay painstaking attention to their children's future life and this approach would be beneficial mutually.
The second reason behind my opinion is rooted in the fact that parents and adults have very hectic daily schedule and they are under great amount of pressures and tensions. Furthermore, in our current economic climate, fathers and mothers have to work permanently from dawn to dusk to be able to handle family's requirements. Even after doing their occupational duties and coming back home, they will have numerous household chores to do. Thus, their daily life is really busy and they need a loyal and truthful person to maintain their kids and fulfill their needs. The best option is older siblings. Moreover, these kinds of family ties are more intimate and the chance of establishing rapport among family members is absolutely higher.
In brief, not only looking after the younger kids by their senior siblings would be helpful for both of parents and children mutually but also it will tighten the bonding between family members.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 147, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...having older ones. Opinions are divided as to whether looking after of young children must be...
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Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
... following. The first thing coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, look, moreover, really, second, so, thus, as to, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95100864553 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61484146283 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564841498559 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2829240297 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.714285714 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7857142857 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21190407467 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766361866532 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593361020657 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141171983779 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0763181546428 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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