Some people think that we live in a society where money and possessions are given too much importance. Others believe that this is improving our lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
One of the highly controversial issues today relates to whether people value money and possessions too much or it makes human life better. In this essay, I am going to examine this question from both points of view and then give my own opinion on the matter.
On one side of the argument, there are people who argue that people prioritize money and possessions too significantly. The main reason for believing this is that money takes precedence over what should be valued, such as morality and interpersonal relationships. In today’s world, many people commit crimes, including robbery and even murder for monetary reasons, hurting others. It is also possible to say that financial issues often cause conflicts among individuals and even family members. One good illustration of this is inheritance. It can cause serious problems in a family relationship, destroying the family bond permanently.
On the other hand, it is also possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that money and possessions can enrich our life. People often have this opinion because it enables us to purchase necessities such as sustenance and accommodation. Moreover, people can enjoy luxuries including jewelries or oversea travels, which will bring about great joy. A second point is that our health can be increased by utilizing sufficient financial resources and excellent equipment. Expensive wholesome organic food and cutting-edge training machine can help people to stay healthy. Even if they suffer from diseases, they can receive a good health care at a prestigious hospital which has the latest devices.
In conclusion, I believe that both arguments are convincing. On balance, however, I tend to believe that money and items can make our life happy as long as we have a keen sense of morality, never to harm others for financial reasons.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 298.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19127516779 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86669310749 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610738255034 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7998716021 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5294117647 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222770249529 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067265746272 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556302482341 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145573363062 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552117825346 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 298.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19127516779 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86669310749 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610738255034 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7998716021 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5294117647 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222770249529 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067265746272 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556302482341 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145573363062 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552117825346 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.