Some people think that we should keep away from
others to improve our relationship, because being away
from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think we should always stay with others to have good relationship because we can communicate with them more often. What do you think?
Since the dawn of civilization human being try to socilize with others in order to fulfill his natural desires. one of these prominent desires is that people need to sterengthen their relation with their intimate friends. To accomplish this mision, from my prespective it is more beneficail to spend time with our friends as much as possible.I fell this way because of the following reasons.
first of all, the more we spend time with our friend, the more it is likely that we can identify our friend's positive characteristics. All friendshipa are based on possitive impression that friends has towards each others. Not only that, but we can learn about our friend's seemingly negative characteristics, which can heplp us to find the underlying reason behind that annoying behaviour .some times we may understand this seemingly demerts is some thing possitive in our friends. For instance, one of my dear friends always reject our invitation to parties and dates, which frustrate me .However, my friend was so lovely that I contineu spending time with him. Finally I found out that she has a ill mother who neads care.If I had not spent so much time with him, I would not understand this and never my negative impression toward may friend chande in to possitive one.
second, spending so much time with a friend can lead to dependancy , which makes the cutting the friendly relation very difficult. it is completely natural that two people as friends face various problems in their friendship.moreover, these conflicts can give rise to the idea of finihing the relationship as first soloution that comes to parties mind.Under mentioned circumstances, dependancy can prohibit that easy solution to resolve the problem. For instance, my girlfriend and I spend a lot of time together every day together. Once there was a conflict between us in regard to a purchase that costs only 50$, that show how this was superficial. Although the first thing that bear to our minds was breaking up our relation, due to dependency that wa had developed over time, we rule out this idea very soon.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that spending more time can make the rapports stronger. that is because this time can help us to know our friends' merit and demerits more precisely, and because it can fotify relations by developing dependency.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, as to, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05398457584 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85143884461 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547557840617 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.3953069374 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.066666667 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9333333333 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.5376344086 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192647494187 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685505728071 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506063154722 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124488813406 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0197710318375 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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