Some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship, because being away from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think we should always stay with others to have good relationship because we can communicate with them more often. What do you think?
A great deal of attention has been attracted to the humans' relationships coping with the fact that whether it would be a good idea to be always close to each other in order to build a strong relation or not. Personally, I subscribe to the view that being in contact with each other plays a crucial role in the quality of our relationship. To advocate this viewpoint, two main reasons are elaborated in what fallows.
To begin with, under no circumstance can a typical individual make perfect relationship with a particular person unless he/she has gained valuable experience about the character of that person. In fact, the more people share their idea and characteristic with each other, the greater likelihood of having a reasonable understanding of each other will occur. Therefore, it would be more logical to be in close relationship in order to realize some special features about each other which subsequently lead to making an excellent relation. My life can illustrate this point clearly. Being at the age of 20 and living at dormitory, I had made numerous friend from different type and character. When I search through the way in which I succeeded in my relation, I found that I had spent considerable amount of time in getting information about my friends’ behavior, likes and dislikes and etc. Therefore, they tended to have spent more time with me since I was aware of the ways that I can help them or how I can make them feel better when they are not in a good mode. Had I not spent much time with my friends and learnt about their character, I would not be able to make perfect relationships.
Secondly, human beings tend to be with those who has some special characteristic such as loyalty. In other words, when a man is in a dilemma or has experienced an inhospitable event, become more vulnerable and eagerly need the help of a person to be able to overcome that terrible occasion. Therefore, if we are close enough to our friends in these conditions, and try to assist them to solve their problem, they feel our loyalty toward the existed relation and in this way we can perfectly improve our relation. For example, one of my best friend, Alex, had fallen in love with one of our classmate which was not successful at the end. Even though he was not my intimate friend at those time, as he mentioned, when I helped him at that situation to forget his bad experience and start a new life, he changed his attitude and found me a loyal and helpful person. From that time up to now, we have a perfect relation and are always with each other.
In sum, above from aforementioned explanation, I do believe that people should be in close contact to be able to build a deep relation. This is because people incline to be with those who have already spend time in knowing their character and also those who are beside them in difficult situations.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 887, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ends' behavior, likes and dislikes and etc. Therefore, they tended to have spent mo...
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Line 13, column 202, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
...cline to be with those who have already spend time in knowing their character and als...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in fact, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2373.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67125984252 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75524739049 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488188976378 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.2880086745 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.894736842 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7368421053 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42105263158 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264770687766 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856395000062 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662262766166 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167192388002 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00844029280852 0.0645574589148 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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