Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I strongly remember my childhood dreams to become independent just in time when my parents would want to see me making my living successfully. In modern world we can see a tendency among some young people to become emancipated as soon as possible. On the contrary, there is an opinion which is being shared by another part of young people to stay in their families for long, even when they start getting older. These are the two different situations, and I have my own opinion on them.
In my opinion, tendency of staying in the family for a shorter time can easily make many families divided due to lack of time being spent together and also due to loss of understanding between each other. We have seen these divisions so many times. One of the meanings of phrase "to stay in the family" is "to stay in a common business that is ruled by one family". If this division of a person and his family also touches some common material wealth and money, then it is no longer a peaceful process.
One of these cases is the story of Robert Zildjian, who was not included into the list of names in his father's deathwish, so he was not able to take his part of heritage and to start ruling his family's business of percussion that was founded in the XVIIth century. He became independent from his family and started his own business of the same profile. Nowadays we know about the rivalry between these families that lasts for forty years.
One of the cases where we can see the opposite situation is when a family keeps their members inside the whole house for a long time. The story tells that my cousins, who are already twenty six and thirty years old, keep living in the family house, bringing some part of their salaries to help their parents completing all these regular house-hold chores. They are trying hard for a sake of common happiness, and they are making their living together, so they would always help each other with money if somebody suddenly faces material trouble.
Let's not forget that the most important goal of every family is to help every child to grow peacefully and successfully, so the person would get easily socialized and involved into processes that help us to make our living. Whatever it takes to
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1848.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6432160804 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43996629471 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527638190955 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.6472758258 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.5 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.875 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.125 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215057923576 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681626724467 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432944574482 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108940320504 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.066226691579 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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