Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
Both choice have their merits and the better choice may differ between individuals due to their financial conditions, place of the job or home, or personality. However, I believe it is better for young adults to live independently from their parents as soon as possible from my own experience.
The main reason is that young adults can understand what is required to run their live through living separate from parents. When I graduated the high school, I decided to live with my friend. Soon after we start living on our own, we realize basic goods for living vary from toilet papers to dishes. While I live with my parents, those items were there without my effort, meaning my parents bought and placed them. We learned we have to spend time and money to prepare those items and maintain appropriate stocks. This was burdensome actually, while we wanted to take time to prepare for university classes, earning money by part-time job, and having drinks with friends. However, this experience gave us chance to learn how to balance those activities keeping physically and mentally healthy status. The sooner you experience living apart from parents, the sooner you can get used to the life, which helps you prepare for the living with full-time job.
Another reason is you can choose best place to live. Typically the original house is chosen based on parents needs, such as commuting time to their jobs. However, now that you have your own life and needs, you should decide where to live based on your own needs. Backing to my experience, my parents home was 1.5-hour distance from my university, which made me waist time just going to the university. With my own home, I squeezed the commuting time to 20 minutes so that I was able to spend time on more meaningful activities.
In conclusion, although it depends on individual situation, I believe living independent from parents is better choice for young adults. They can learn how they live, get used to the life in an early stage, and make decision for their own interest.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'give'?
Suggestion: give
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'choose the best'.
Suggestion: choose the best
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to best', 'to well'
Suggestion: to best; to well
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Typically,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, however, if, may, so, while, apart from, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1690.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85632183908 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47339523209 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534482758621 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.1367151687 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.4117647059 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4705882353 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29411764706 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340306391739 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116733861004 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102560245235 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233060040091 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073510760835 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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